by adoka
I think what separates erotica from porn is the relationships. This story starts it off well by the detail about the father/son relation but falters when it comes to the relation between the father and the caregiver. It just ..happens.. like the appearance of the pizza guy in a porn movie. It needs more build, more substance. The sex itself was fine, but just came out of nowhere.
The following line from the story...“You are a handsome man, Mr. Jakes and well,” she looked me over carefully, “I can see that you are a well endowed man. I would like to know if you would help me by fucking me in the ass.” ...this is EASILY the worst line and worst transition I've ever seen in any story...EVER.
your audience patiently awaits the next installment of mrs. sanchez. good story line with other possibilities.
IT;S BEEN A WHILE WITH NO NEW EFFORTS ON YOUR PART, WHY?
KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.
Great story! I imagined myself in that storeroom fondling and kissing the ladies keister
Loved it! Especially the part where she lifts up her dress to show her plump juicy ass
Thought it was terrific- especially the part where she wiggles her keister at him.