All Comments on 'Dumped!'

Nice plot is there more?

good story but it needs to be longer and more drawn out. let's have a longer part 2 with more detail please!

more

Definitely needs a part 2. :)

Now that you've got our attention - to put it mildly - surely you aren't going to stop. You've got to tell us how these siblings proceed and progress. WIth your writing style you have a great series in you, and you just must .......

I say add his girlfriend to the fun and let your imagination run wild. A little lesbian a little anal whatever you like it will all be good.

I agree with the other comments and can hardly wait for part 2. Yes, do a part 2 with Kelly involved, then part 3 and more. Just let your imagination run wild and put your fantasy in writing.

Looking forward to more.

Tonny

I NEARLY CAME IN MY PANTS THIS IS ONE DAMN HOT STORY PLEASE LET THERE BE MORE TO THIS. "JAKK"

I agree. Part 2 can't be soon enough and I think it'd be cool to add Kelly to the next chapter.

what a fantastic imagination!

surely the best of the last 12 months

very short,but excellent comment-allmost all males dream and fantasise like this!

part 2 without that girlfriend will be more excellent

bwst wishes,sister jenny

Excellant story telling, very hot. Hope you write some more, either along this story line or new.

Thanks

Excellent job of writing and story telling. Good description of details. Please continue writing

Yes I agree with the others that this story can not end here, you have to bring Kelly into it too. He needs to be totally exhausted at the end of each part!! You are doing great -- keep up the good work !!!!

soo niiice omg write more incest stories, i wish i had a brother who i could fuck and get fucked by, damn!

Makes me wish I had a brother. You write great stories, keep up the good work.

Your writing is excellent and the images you "paint" are fantastic! I wish I was her brother in this story.... I could feel myself inside her and nearly exploded myself!! Keep the excellent stories cuming..... ; >

very sexy story. makes me wish for a brother like that

I think there's a reason why I don't have any brothers, and this is one of them. After reading this I would've literally jumped him, great inspiration this would've been lol

Loved it! Please continue!

Thanks!

Sexmate

Wow, that was awsome, I've been looking through here for a long time and that was one of, if not the best. Keep up the excellent work

P.S. hope to see a sequel

Fantastic story, made me cum hard at the end. God, I wish I could have such naughty fun with my sister! :) Keep up the good work

Capt

great story, luck bro, can we have some more

Only in my wildest dreams! Hellava story. Very hot!

Good job...really liked the story

Another great story! As i said in your other story, the only thing that could have been better is if he was letting her know that he was going to flood her unprotected pussy full of his baby seed, and having her beg for him to pull out before he knocked her up.

that made me come so hard i squirted good job.

Sarah, this was you at your very best! I really loved this tale. Thanks for all of your work.

This was a very hot story... definitely one of my new favs..

little less bragadosa

I wish the vote meter went to 10, because that is what this story desearves.

Thank's and I hope you add a chapter to this.

Tender and erotic. Good blend. Nice pic in your Bio too!

That was very hot, i liked the girl resisting at first and then getting into it. It was good because the guy like took control and that made it hot haha.

loved it :)

awesome exciting story. brilliant writing very erotic story. love it from start to finish a true erotic writer.

fuck that was hot. awesome.

...and too quick to the "climax"...Half the battle of these kind of stories is the effectiveness of the "build up"...Just wasn't enough of one to see...I want to like the characters...Great story, but as the song goes ..."John..we hardly knew ye..."Still, I rated it very high in the impact it made...

i loved it. it was so sexy and had just reluctence and love.

Not a bad effort at all, but a bit irritating when you forget whether you are writing in the third person or the first. You need to watch that - it's a very amateurish mistake to make, but soooo annoying for your readers.

Very enjoyable

This is a very well written tale of a horny young brother helping his sister. It should be enjoyed by all the family. Ha!

This would one guy who was either suicidal or as dumb as a block of wood, because I could guarantee that he'd wind up missing a vital part of his anatomy, well it 3 parts missing, aka involuntary sex change, when girlfriend found out.

im thinking this story could defintely do with another chapter to it!

The only problem I Could see is bad spelling.....plus I don't like anything to do with rape.

Holy shit!

I’m the one who’s cold after having to take a shower In freezing ice water ! That was one of the best “quickies” I’ve ever had. Your story rocks !

What exactly is a 'pouting nipple'?

Hot storyline, would be interesting to see where it would go if it continued. Well done. 5 stars.