All Comments on 'Wish Upon A Star'

VERY nicely done - characters allowed to develop and grow at a comfortable pace and are fleshed - not cardboard. Your writing is excellent as well, with good grammar and sentences that make sense - hence it promotes the story rather than interfering.

MORE, PLEASE

A great piece of mature writing....more please!

Very well written! I did notice one run-on sentence and a minor word error ("is" for "his", I believe). Aside from that, I enjoyed the masterful character development, as well as the tapestry of sexual tension that you wove. Please keep writing!

Cheers,

Lalenya :^)

This was a wonderful story. The plot kept me spellbound through the entire story. Excellent job! Keep the stories coming, please!

WELL WRITTEN TO SAY THE LEAST AND A SEXY STORY , WOW WISH THERE WAS MORE TO THIS STORY I COULD READ IT ALL DAY LONG. "JAKK"

Most stories that are written from a woman's point of view, always draw my attention. It kept your interest from begining to end.

I especially liked the friction between to two that slowly disolved by the end of the story.

Very well written!

This story could possible have a sequel..

I will also look for other stories of yours!

One of the best I've ever written. Nice buildup to the ending. Lots of emotion, intellect, and settings.

So many stories are just sexual. This was far more intellectual.

Excellent story. Great character development. Definately made for a sequel. Please keep up the good work

Huggs and kisses

Robin

I loved it! You did an excellent job...keep up the great work!

Great piece of work!! Keep it UP!

Great story one of the best that I have read. I love stories like this that are real stories not just sex. You really get to feel the characters and see how they develope and all throughout the entire story. Please write more. I would love to read more about Piper and Brayden summer!!!!!

Your pacing was ideal. Great story. Thank you for writing it and sharing it.

This was one of the best stories I've ever read. Thank you.

I love "Wishing Upon a Star", it is truly the sweetest story I have ever read. I loved it and I believe it is truly worhty of recognition. I could feel the characters and the story line... I liked your story very much and you should be proud of it... this is the first time I take time to write a comment because you deserve it... your reader,

-m.m

I love your style, it make yearn for more...

Very well crafted and a must read

Fantastic story, and the setting and the Southern expressions are huge bonuses! I used to live in the South, and have really fond memories of the wonderful people that surrounded me.

kEEP-UP THE GREAT WORK!!!

A very well balanced story, worthy of its content. Looking forward to the next, if there is to be one.....please make it so.

Of the stories I've been reading here so far, this is by far the best. The added story line makes this much more than just another 'short sex description.' Looking forward to more from you.

please make a follow up i just loved it of all the stories iv read this, i felt was the most heartfelt and truly breath-taking

it was asome

this is far by the best ive ever read.

..i felt like i was there, reliving falling in love. amazing. i've never left a comment on a story before, but i just feel compelled to on this one.

amazing.....

Words are not enough to express how much i loved this story. GREAT, FANTASTIC,AWESOME job.

this is such a wonderful story I felt as if I were there . You have an amazing imagination , please write more . Best I've ever read.

that was so hot...I wouldnt mind seeing that in a movie! Excellent writing

tht was fuckn hot shit

that was one of the best stories i have ever read please make more stories like that. it was so awesome!!

wish you would write a book on this, its absolutely awsome, you feel the love and the frustration. Great job!!!

That was the best story I've ever read and I've read a lot and that's a 10 out of 10 I mean holy shit great job maybe you can make A wish upon a star II or what not. Thanks for the story! Holy shit

I really need a 2nd chapter here! That story was sooooooooooo awesome!

If I had to rate that on a scale of 1 to 10, it would be like 17. This story is amazing, and it would be awesome if there were a second part to it.

When I discovered this website several years ago, this was the very first story I read. Just recently, I wanted to read it again, and I finally found it after weeks (seriously) of searching.

Forever and ever will I remember this tale, even though I could not remember the characters' names. I love the awkwardness and the tension between Piper and Brayden.

And I am glad that it was their story that served as my initiation to this site!

this is just perfect!!!!

The writing is great and the story is wonderful. Bravo Lynne84!!!! :)

I've had more enjoyable rope burns.

I think you are an immature jerk. If you cant say something nice, Shut your mouth to stop from showing your ignorance, immaturity, stupidity or a combo of those traits.

To the Author;

I found the story to be sweet and loving, tho a bit cliche. I prefer longer stories and it should have included a moment of concern about pregnancy. I'll pass on the disease aspect as it seemed both of them were relatively safe there.

And there are a few grammar / spelling errors but overall I gave it 5 stars.

The story is more important than those.

Not a lot of stories can keep the interest of those of us with experience, emotions, and high intelligence. Yes I said High as in top 4% of the USA population.

And while this isn't a new favorite, it's much better than most.

Ramjet

Great story, thank you.

I hate to be one of the few, if only, negative responders, but here goes. I know this is all fantasy, but good fantasy is best when there is a shred of reality. Go into the mind of a young woman. She is pissed at him when she first meets him, then less than 12 hours later she is masturbating while thinking of him and 12 hours later she tries to jump his bones. There is no explanation of why she changes her mind. No woman I know would make such a change in such a short time. Needs a reason because as it is it seems forced and hollow.

This is the second Literotica story I’ve read this week where an author turns an adult woman into a small child during thunderstorms. I’m getting tired of that. Otherwise, I like the story.