All Comments on '(Illicit) Shower Thoughts'

Some great word play here. I love the cum like conditioner and the Moby Dick reference. And make no mistake, lover boy. While you are fucking her and fantasizing the other, then and there is when your wife imagines. Great words. Kudos on a job well done!

Everyone should have a shower fantasy lover. Is there anything more sensual that water, hot water - it's sound warming your body while you slide your cream-lathered hands all over your body ...imagining...imagining him...imagining her...

Sappholovers, you took me to the shower and washed my body with your touch.

I want a shower now!

Oh my, my... Sappholovers it's too good, stop it, stop it now! Beautifully captured the feeling of two worlds operating at the same time, that steamy internal world of the author's mind and the cool routine of the morning...wonderful writing, loved it. Cheers, 'rain

This is really hot. Like it lots. One can almost 'see' it all happening, or imagine it at some point in the shower!

Wonderful expression! This is my life!

Does he think of me that way too when he is in the shower??MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM....

I thought your poem was too long. An interesting topic indeed, but it could have used either a few twists and turns, or a briefer storyline.

I thought the tempo and tone was well constructed. The poem was hot and kept me wanting to continue forward with you. Very nice work in drawing my interest with a riveting pace.

The story line is old as a world. It has a sense of something``brainless-untochable-pure`` The rythm has to go ahead indeed...didn`t catch it here at all!

I thought it was awesome. Excellent use of imagery and the tempo was wonderful!

Awesome job!!

such a real time rhythm and the picture of how we all often weave a tangled web.

Mind-sex is fine ~ if you don't mind.

love love love this!