All Comments on 'the Temperature of vapour'

but felt the expansive alliteration at the end was too much and detracted from the whole.

As for the alliteration, how about an extra line break to give the reader a pause:

So Many cannot

they are only looking

transient images, vacuous faces

nameless shifts and madding mobs

merely meeting in meandering

manners manifold maunderings

My maudlin drinks

Am I the pianoman

or Only the Trumpeteer

I think this is my favorite of yours since I have been here at Lit..love this line especially:

sometimes

time stops to keep it perfect

yeah, thats a comforting thought, and also very enlightening, if true..explains why my time just keeps rolling along...downhill ;) :rose:

thanks razz, and belated happy birthday