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by RazzRajen

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 20 years ago
Very

vivid imagery, RazzRajen. Especailly the last two stanzas. Good work, much enjoyed.

Maria2394Maria2394almost 20 years ago
usually your poems

are waaay too dark for me, but lately, I have seen something I didnt see before. I love your images Razz, and especially the way that you use words to make them sound alive. this is really good, it sounded right, worked perfectly for me, thank you :)

perksperksalmost 20 years ago
posted on new poems 6-20-04

"Reflected shadows in

panes of shattered lake

surfaces"

ohhhhh, that's purdy! Even if I might remove "surfaces" with the use of "panes" it's pretty understood, I would think. You like the big words too, Jazzy, but they only kill me once in awhile. Good thing I have that built in dictionary. "agglomerate" and "accreted" one right after the other, made me lose your imagery, because I's not as edumacated. Pretty good poem, I struggled with clarity here and there, but I enjoyed it anyway. Plus, you have some meter that sneaks up on the reader, and I enjoy little suprises like that.

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