All Comments on 'The Shores Of My Dreams'

That was just beautiful. ;-)

I love and hate the sea - My best friend got killed at sea.

I'm always happiest sat alone by the shore.

Poems like this I devour.

This one is a well-written gem that made me happy and sad.

Thanks. It is one I will keep and read often.

One of the things you can do to improve is cut away all wasted words i.e. ask yourself do I need this "this", "and" "I" etc.

"Sail by beneath that starlit sky?" do you need "by" or even "that"?

Sail beneath starlit sky - sounds almost 19th century, that would be another problem, too much sounds like something else.

I did read your plea in a thread, and I hope you take it in the spirit that it is given, because, with just a little more work, you can make it sing, very pleasantly. And if you don't like what I say, go pound the crap out of my 'llusions, just leave a reason.

But a lover can still the tempest here,

And drive the ghosts away.

This beach I can never share

Save by ink and pen,

Keep up the good work. :)