All Comments on 'Fiona'

What could have been an interesting tale is spoiled by the number of spelling mistakes. It only takes a minute to check.

Why bother to give a zero to an author? Surely if a story is worth submitting it deserves some marks at least. Have you ever noticed how many nasty comments come from the pen of "anonymous" but I have still to find a story written by him (or her). Why not sign your name, so that we can make rude comments about your work? (If you have submitted any, which I doubt.)

What an awesome submission for a friends fantasy.

You have covered all the bases cleverly and furthermore taken us int a wonderful world of debauchery and sexual liberation.

Full credit to the authors prowess and expliciteness.

Loved this story. I'm sure things would be "different" at work after a night like that. I was a little surprised that Dee didn't get involved and could happen in the next chapter. Jim should really get a shot at Fi as well, it sounds like she would be more than interested.