All Comments on 'Deliquescence by the sea'

has been mentioned in Tuesday's reviews.

ideas and language.

I'd like to see it condensed down just a little.

the last stanza is great stuff:

for midwinter bloom

angels on pins

and elephants

though the needle's eye

we all dream of this

but do we know why?

Thank you

Loved it. Thanks Liar.

This was my favorite today. Well written, clever phrases and interesting images.

as if chaos theory fractals

were beneficial fairies

heeding to our wish

and curving logic

to please whims

Great words!

that "deliquescence" was melded into the English language just after our American revolution. It gave me a strange perspective as I eased through your wonderful poem.

I did miss the repition of "sometimes" in the third strophic section of the poem, after your line "we dream for something larger"... not that it mattered.

Thanks for the read, Liar.

enjoyed this verse...the rest has already been said....o)blue

is found here:

we all dream

for something larger

than a tepid trifle's

twin edged kiss

something more

than this

Some delicious phrasing going on here!

This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 37,000 poems.

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