All Comments on 'Moonlight Journey'

really lovely writing and pacing here.

The only weak spot:

~Her heart cannot be

confined by traps

of brick and stone.~

just too dull to be mixed in with the flowing free images in the rest of the poem.

save this and when that perfect verse comes...add it

And this will be a beautiful work

This poem is mentioned in the New Poems thread on the bulletin board

tou have missed this poem, great internal rhyme, beautiful images, good work TRH, enjoyed bery much :)