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by sandspike08/25/04

I read a long one

I kept trying to stop but couldn't. I have run the race
many times and loved seeing you pump yourself up. You
probably won't get to keep it, sorry.

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by Maria239408/25/04

Ive told myself

these very thing so many times, but its taken me 41 years to actually believe I deserved anything other than just playing it safe..excellent work :)

...I want to, for just once;
let go let it out.
Be me, right up front.
No apologies.
No holds barred.
Here I am, in your face.
Take it or leave it...


That verse bears repeating, again and again

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by SeattleRain08/25/04

~a few impressions

an enjoyable read. You used so many borrowed phrases, ready or not, monday night q back etc, that it is clear that it was not unintentional, so it felt right

-- just a quick suggestion, consider putting the first line (any maybe some of the other common phrases) in italics, and breaking up the list of no's

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by Tathagata08/25/04

the message

is wonderful.
A rebirth, a journey of self discovery, the coming out..
the list of " No's"...perhaps:

No hiding,
self-protective actions, self-editing.
No self-deprecating humor.
ambiguous remarks or second-guesses.
No Monday quarterbacking.

just an idea,


if you boil this down to it's key points
It would be a knock out poem
Excellent idea
put it down and come back to it every few weeks and rewrite 1 verse

: )

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by lostandfounder08/26/04

Not your most poetic work...

but probably the most powerfull. This is a statement of life and living that demands to be read.

"Sure, its scary.
Thats life, baby."

Damn straight.

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