All Comments on 'Second Sight'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Second Sight could be 1st rate, with a bit more work.

A promising start to the story, some really nice descriptive writing and some great similes but flaws in the characters' behavior, and a rushed scene when Alex is revealed to Olivia, detracts from the story. Could be really good with a redraft and some alterations.

FrivolousFrivolousabout 6 years ago

Erotic and visceral. I like. Thanks for writing and sharing.

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