by simply_cyn
Excellent story. A loving couple who enjoy having sex with each other. A great "Loving Wife" story.
The story was about submission/domination, so it was in the wrong category like most loving wives posted.
In the sub/dom storyline it fails due to the fact of lack of control of the sub as they are the one's with strength enough to be dominated to guide the dom, in this case the husband.
The writing lacked inspiration and was shallow. The best "feel" of the story was it being a quickie where it was more venting than sex between a loving couple. That was the strength of it as a fantasy playtime for them, but it reads as a normal intercourse, so then it fails again.
Try to paint a more sensual portrait for your characters.
The erotic tale of a couple deeply in love with one another. Hence, great sentences like this:
Todd slammed his cock into his wife’s beautiful cunt as he continued to ravish the flesh of her neck,.....
Another loving couple. Aberration, considering author's other work. But welcome.