All Comments on 'Sunday Afternoon at Home'

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sherlock40sherlock40over 19 years ago
Hot, hot, hot, hot!

Excellent story. A loving couple who enjoy having sex with each other. A great "Loving Wife" story.

batjac69batjac69over 19 years ago
Wrong Category

The story was about submission/domination, so it was in the wrong category like most loving wives posted.

In the sub/dom storyline it fails due to the fact of lack of control of the sub as they are the one's with strength enough to be dominated to guide the dom, in this case the husband.

The writing lacked inspiration and was shallow. The best "feel" of the story was it being a quickie where it was more venting than sex between a loving couple. That was the strength of it as a fantasy playtime for them, but it reads as a normal intercourse, so then it fails again.

Try to paint a more sensual portrait for your characters.

LibrandesireLibrandesireover 11 years ago
Great story

The erotic tale of a couple deeply in love with one another. Hence, great sentences like this:

Todd slammed his cock into his wife’s beautiful cunt as he continued to ravish the flesh of her neck,.....

26thNC26thNCover 4 years ago
Another

Another loving couple. Aberration, considering author's other work. But welcome.

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