by Darksider
This is one of the best Gay Male submissions I have read to date. However it does need more detail and I hope there is a second one to cum. Keep Up the good Work
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Definitely loved this one. Woo! All wet & bothered. Thank you! A second installment would be greatly appreciated.
WOW a good story, BUT, needs more detail, more detail and a to be longer, hope u write a follow up soon, with this in mind, i still loved it, just instead of good could be AMAZING
this is one of the best stories i have ever read. if it were longer and a bit more descriptive i would have popped just reading it!
The plot was funny, because it was so surreal - like a porn flick. It could've used a few more gooey details
A bit cliche but still hot.. there are some straight guys in every school.. it wouldve been better if maybe the main character fell in mud and had a longer shower.. then josh had come into find him cuz he hadnt seen him and then coach came in and startd the whole intermate suck off scene
Some of the spelling mistakes were distracting, but I loved how it kept building and didn't dally on extraneous stuff.
it does need more detail, and a part two... .. the coach take him on day one is hard to believe.. maybe on the second gym class.. just letting the new guy know what he had to look forward too...
Seriously this is sick shit. If this gets you off you are a horrible person.
Gym class can be such a hot place...all those hard masculine bodies. Josh seems a really good guy that Nick could connect with. Maybe the mature and muscular Josh could have a bit of a hairy chest, and love Nick and Nick could love him in return.
Always enjoyed looking at the masculine and muscular bodies in gym class -- some with hairy chests and abs, some without. Cocks of all sizes and development. Some sizable pubic bushes, others sparsely haired. But I did find some great sexy blowjob partners in my two years of gym classes!