by The Mutt
well...I agree...there was no need to be rude! Isn't it rather chilling to think how a 'cut-down' like that in a bar, centring out possibly an individual that is not quite 'balanced', how it might affect them...what it makes them think about doing...how unfair and unjust the comment was... and what needs to be done to this person to teach them a lesson for being so rude... yes...chilling.
Pass the cherries please.... *wink*
Like a cherry this tale was short and sweet...popped then gone. Enjoyable, good luck and Happy Halloween. (~_*)
Hi, Mutt
That was short, with an unexpected ending. Her reply to you was predictable but not your response to her reply. I can see where "you" were coming from because I have always felt like I was the guy in the bar who had such tasty ice cream.
vengence, Mutt. I can't say I could work up much sympathy for either character--the killer's lonliness doesn't seem enough to justify what he does although her behavior is atrocious--but the food metaphors you use throughout the story make the shocker ending that much creepier. :)
It was a good story, but finished too suddenly, with no clear ending
A delicious tale. With men always comparing women and their parts to food, the turn of the last paragraph almost made me giddy. Terrific!
Up until the end it was a very well constructed story that kept one's interest. The end is as if someone else finished it. The author could have elaborated on the guy's life as a it drove him to murder.
It seemed a bit more like a poem than a story. It seemed to have a patern to the word and a rhythm that made almost musical. I would have liked it better in the poetry section.
An intoxicating rhythm, a flow to it that is rarely seen...I have shown this story to many of my friends...and the reaction is always the same.....WOW
Sad. Creepy. Deep. I knew what was coming but I had to read it. Thanks!
Hannibal Lechter has nothing on this guy! That even creeped ME out! 5 BIG Stars for this one!