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Jerry Sr.Jerry Sr.over 19 years ago
SHOCK

It has happed before Doctors have been wronge

Nightowl22Nightowl22over 19 years ago
MY! MY!

No wonder he slid in like greased lightening. Doctors have been wrong but a sperm test isn't likely to be wrong.

Looks like she'll be going on a cruise out the door.

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I really liked this story. I also hope that you write the next part to this story...soon. Please.

patricia51patricia51over 19 years ago
Ooops!

I think we all saw the ending coming but it actually built the anticipation for me rather than spoiled it. I was reading along with bated breath waiting for the climax. Well done. I'd love to see a follow-up story but at the same time I can understand it if you leave it open-ended for each reader's imagination.

gnfgnfover 19 years ago
I totally agree with

Patricia51. Great story or real life situation. I don't mind making up my own mind as to how this plays out; however if you want to let us know the end results it will be okay also.

You have a gift, hope to read more in the near future.

George

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Let's hear the ending

Like most, I saw the end coming but felt that built the anticipation.

Since this is said to be a true story, I'd like to hear how it really turned out. Just my prurient interest I suppose. I'll be waiting anxiously to see if it gets posted.

Sure the doctor's could have made a mistake, but some of the information in the story indicates otherwise. I'd like to hear her story and find out if the marriage survived.

Curious in PA.

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Great and Sad !!!!!

Really a good read. Sad that is true. Lucky he was able to catch her, makes you think about the other kids and who the father may be. If she had just a fling because of the absence that would be something they may get through, but to try and deceive him into being the father of someone else baby would make it impossible for me. Tell us the rest.

Randy

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Let's hear it all

Like most I figured out that she'd been having a little fun on her own. But it's still a great story and I'd like to hear the truth of what happened afterward. Don't keep us in suspense....

Ghost BearGhost Bearover 19 years ago
Absence

doesn't make the heart grow fonder. It's more like out of sight,out of mind. Too bad it's a true story. I went through a similar esperience with a girlfriend and it hurt.

The author's name probably tells us how the story turned out. I would like to see if I am right or wrong.

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
sounds like a Dr. Phil or Oprah Story

The tale was not very erotic and seemed to jump all around. I am interested in the true results. I am guessing he goes to his friend, who picked out the clothes

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
NO NO NO

Don't leave us hanging like this. Like the bank robber in the "Dirty Harry" movie, We gots to know.

The guy should have went to New Jersey.

Excellent start. This has to continue. By all indications, the guy had been faithful while in Texas and Australia. Throw the worthless cheating bitch out. hopefully, if she maintains her pregnancy, and gives birth, she will die from the next embolism, and some other poor bastard won't have to fuck with her again.

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Hard to believe

It's hard to believe that so many people think this is good writing. The grammar is so poor it takes away from the story! Perhaps I'll try to come back and read it again sometime for the story's sake, but I doubt it!

HarddaysknightHarddaysknightover 19 years ago
Mistakes

You don't have any concept of punctuation, or even spelling. You must wish you had paid more attention in school. If you want to write, find someone to edit the rambling group of thoughts you present.

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Very poor writing

If what you say is true, your wife was given a death sentence. Just because the story is true , it does not mean that the story has to be incoherent.I could not follow the plot clearly. Please resubmitt your story after it's been edited by one of Literotica's volunteers editors.

http://www.literotica.com:81/members/editors_find.php

SalamisSalamisover 19 years ago
I got it...I think

The story concept was very good and I am curious to find out how this situation between them was resolved. So I hope to see the next or final chapter to this tale.

However, I cannot overlook the poor construction. There are the many editing issues with spelling and punctuation. Those can be overcome if you take more time and proofread your work. Other elements of the story may require an editor, another set of eyes so that you don't ramble.

For example, I was totally confused when it came to the husband's job. Did he switch jobs? If so, then how did he get an award so soon on the new one? They lived in Texas, then Chicago, then planned on New Jersey but went to Texas instead ...yet the Austrailia trip was still on? And who is Joni and why was she important to the plot? Oh, and since pregnancy is a health risk, why would she risk unprotected sex? Wasn't her health his motivation for the operation?

You told us that there were many unanswered questions. So I was forewarned. But you should have provided a lot more coherant detail.

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Interesting story

I thought the story was interesting if a little confusimg with all the geographic changes. I know it's fantasy, but if any pregnancy is life threatening why woud she not have used some kind of protection, (pill, condom etc) and why would she be so thrilled by the pregancy?-- would like to see sequal, ending was so brief, one sentence and end of story. Did she have some logical excuse? did they divorce? did she have lover in her house with her children home? You get the idea. the Ct. Yankee

laidbacklaidbackover 19 years ago
great .

please continue ..it sure seems anal to worry about punctuation.

Laidback

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Great story

I to would like to know how it ends. The ending was brief and sudden, I am sure there is more.

I to found my self jumping around a bit to try and figure out what the sentence I just read meant. Story construction could be a little more refined and less confusing.

However I still managed to finish and liked the concept of the story. I am sure she figured she would never get caught, that is until the baby came and it looked nothing like you!

phoenix764phoenix764over 19 years ago
Reasonable

The story is good, but it does need a proof reader for gammar and spelling errors. I would like to know the ending of this story, because many things could happen. If it happened in my case, I would first have my sperm production rechecked, and then have a DNA paternity test done on all of the children to determine if they were mine. If the children were mine and the sperm sample showed 0 count, then I would demand that both myself and my wife submit to a lie detector test ( only fair if it is done to both parties ) about infidelity in the marriage. I would also insist on STD tests. If possible I would want to test the DNA of the fetus, but that may have to wait until it was born. If my wife passed every test and looked like she didn't cheat, then it becomes a matter of her safety. I would push / insist on an abortion with the hospital monitoring so she survives it. Also, I would insist on the remains of the fetus being DNA tested for paternity. If she didn't cheat and survived the abortion, then we would need some serious counselling to repair the trust issues in the marriage. If the fetus wasn't mine, she's almost certainly out the door - I won't raise my wife's kid from adultery. Depending on the other tests ( i.e. paternity of the other kids, and the lie detector )would determine how bitter and immediate the split would be. The worst case is of course all the kids weren't mine, and I not only am throwing her out, but I'm sentencing her effectively to death and the kids possibly to who knows where. It's cases like these you hope for a lab mistake, because otherwise the family is destroyed.

jaggers0053jaggers0053over 19 years ago
shame

since its a true story i guess we'll hear the outcome. very difficult to follow time line of this story so i'm going to assume there that there is no way he could get her pregnant.that being said i think the sad (and disgusting) part of the story is the wife trying to pass this future child off as his.

don

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Truth IS Stranger Than Fiction

Interesting story. I am looking forward to the next chapter to see how this played out in real life.

Story construction was a bit confusing, but I did manage to follow and am really really interested in how the author settled the delimma.

Two young children, pregnant wife who is obviously pregnant by someone other than the husband, a pregnancy that is potentially life threatening and the issue of truth, credibility and faithfulness.

Truth is truely stranger than fiction.

canttrustagaincanttrustagainover 19 years agoAuthor
timeline

I hope that I'm allowed to Poast comments here. I would like to clear up several points that people have made. First is the timeline:

Move to Dallas late Dec to Jan

Vasectomy 1st Sat in May

Testing Begun early June tests every 2 weeks

Declared Sperm Free 6 July 1990

(ALTHOUGH i WAS COFIRMED BY PHONE CALL ON THE 6TH WAS NOT ABLE TO GET TYPEWRITTEN LETTER UNTIL TH 7TH OF JULY

Return from 60 days AUSTRALIA 1 AUG 1990

Sorry had hoped to have more room

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Resolution:

Please write the rest of the story. Give us some resolution. An explanation on her part. A true story is often painful. perhaps two endings leaving it up to the readers to decide which is the real resolution. But it does cryout for an ending.If not for punctuation I would of given it 100%. It's still a good story even if painful. Hope you finish it.

Jim

Nightowl22Nightowl22over 19 years ago
7 weeks----8 weeks

She's 7 weeks pregnant and you're gone over 8 weeks. Tests are redundant.

Nightowl22Nightowl22over 19 years ago
Another problem!

Has big dick given her, and you, any STD that will show up later on?

And it's either big dick or a lot of dicks that strectch the pussy! Which was it?

nakedtypistnakedtypistover 19 years ago
Confussed?

I had a hard time keeping the 'what' straight with the 'when'. Could you just simplify it and let us know how long it had been since you did her last? Or did you do her when you were shooting blanks and didn't tell her? I got lost.

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Confused

Is this site an medical journal site or what? Boring!!

gnfgnfover 19 years ago
The only part I can't figure out is about

Thanksgiving. Last I heard it takes place on the 3rd Thursday of Nov. 5 1/2 weeks from 1 Aug 1990 is not even close to November.

However be that as it may, from what you wrote below the last time you had unprotected sex with your wife was in April 1990 mid month. You said that she had just started her period on your last trip before your operation on 5 May 1990. Since you were only going home every 2 weeks that would put it about the weekend of the 14th of April. After your surgery you were laid up with bed rest and then you left for Austrailia on either 2 Jun or 9 Jun 1990, (confusing since in the story you said you were gone for 7 weeks, but below you said 60 days or 8 weeks).

Dosen't really matter since during the time in Austrailia you were tested as sperm free on 6 July 1990. You made no mention of going home after your surgery and before your trip to Austrailia so adding that to the trip makes it a period of around 109 days (over 3 1/2 months). She said that she is 7 plus weeks pregnant, even that does not compute since you were only gone for 5 1/2 weeks since you got back from your trip to be home on your anniversary.

Sounds like your wife and her best friend Judy had a few parties while you were away. Your words "She was shocked when I arrived at the airport." "I slid into her easier than I ever had."

Please do write how it really came out. If it has taken you 14 years to write about this it must still hurt alot. I am making an assumption that the playing around didn't start until you were away from home for so long and her best friend showed up. It really sucks when a trust is broken, it is almost never regained.

If you do write the ending of this tale, try using one of the editors on this site to help make the story flow a little easier for those who can't do anything but complain that you are not submitting an english lit paper.

George

gizzmo301gizzmo301over 19 years ago
great

I give it high marks because it a true story. I is hard to read and follow along with what is happening. Its like you telling me about it instead of it being in a story form. MOST of all thought I would like to know what happened next and SOON.

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Tough break

Looks like you were faced with two choices: continue to live with a faithless bitch or break up your family. I hope you chose the latter, since the evidence shows that kids do better in a "broken" home than with parents who cannot get along.

I also hope that you were able to get a divorce in a jurisdiction that awarded you custody and child support, instead of the cheating spouse.

fdkmanfdkmanover 19 years ago
Surprise Indeed!

You have my condolences. It is too bad that you had to be so wrapped up with work and gone so much that your wife felt that she had to take up with another man. That was bad enough but then to try to pass off the bastards child as yours was adding insult to injury!

As the others have written please let us know how things turned out. Personally I hope you filed for divorce and took the children. A person who can do this to someone who she professed to love is beyond contempt. Either way I hope you are doing well now and that life has been better to you.

Ray

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 19 years ago
She loose???

Otherwise, I would have rated the story higher. Vaginas are very streachable and rebound. See http://www.netdoctor.co.uk/sex_relationships/facts/penissize.htm . In any event a baby if far bigger than any penis.

EspressoBolusEspressoBolusover 16 years ago
true story?

i will take your word that thus is a true story. However, when I had a vasectomy, in 1982! there was no pain after 24 hours. Swelling such as you describe could only occur with an infection. The wife's disregard for her own health and safety is mystifying.

DWornockDWornockover 12 years ago
Only in modern times would it be such a surprise.

For eons, women have found a dependable mate and good provider and then, when ovoluting, had sneaky sex with more symmetrical (typically Alpha) males in order to select the best genes for her eggs.

No harm in that. After all, a women would be doing her mate a favor by giving him a prettier baby to support. It is unfortunate that modern birth control methods and DNA testing tends to throw a monkey wrench into the ability of a wife to fool her husband into believing he is the father when a superior man gets her pregnant.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
DWmoroncok regales us with idiotic psychobabble

That moron's commentary would get 5* in the "Humor & Satire" category

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
DWmoroncok regales us with idiotic psychobabble

That moron's commentary would get 5* in the "Humor & Satire" category

DunaDunaover 12 years ago
Science, science.....

@Dear Wornock

1. Yes you may be right. It may be this was the couse to be 1 sort of Y chromosome type in the all World. The all Homo Sapiens Sapiens populatio were only 500 member in Africa 74000 years ago after the Toba super vulcano eruption and the all Y chromosoma origins from 1 male from that time. (There was a climatic catastropha for more Centruries.)

2. However We do not live in the mid paleolite, we lives in a modern technical Civilization and the science has achived the DNA test and only money question to know the "provider" he is or is not the DNA father his wife baby!!!!!!!!!!

MarvinSMarvinSover 12 years ago
Boring

Perhaps it needs some dialogue to make it more interesting.

m48gunnerm48gunnerover 11 years ago
Pretty Sad

Like to hear a bit more background from her perspective, and also how it ended. Was reconciliation possible, how about the child-wasn't it's fault..so what happened?

betrayedbylovebetrayedbylovealmost 11 years ago
Damn

Fucking cheating whore cunt. Why do women like this exist? Is God punishing the human race? Chapter 2 huh? Damn

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
Well THAT was a surprise!

You need two things. Either spell check or an editor. And a good attorney.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Dumb as a donut.

And I like donuts. But this was simply awful.

Tim413413Tim413413about 9 years ago
Nice premise.

Awful writing. Especially re dialogue. Can anyone determine the timeline? TX, Chicago, NJ, Australia? Wife has to give consent to his vasectomy? I doubt it. The feds are moving "medical privacy" in the other direction.

GoodhueGoodhueover 7 years ago
Curbside For This Cunt!

Curbside For This Cunt! What a piece of shit! This guy had better be planning some serious revenge!

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
That's all tere is????

Give me a fucking break!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
A 3

Good until the last line. THEN WHAT HAPPENED?

YouamiYouamiabout 6 years ago
Jesus, man...what a tale!

canttrustagain

Thank you for contributing this story. I found your own life-story an emotional rollercoaster. More power to you for surviving and trying to get on with life!

26thNC26thNCover 5 years ago
Great Flash

You covered the story completely in one succinct page.

26thNC26thNCover 4 years ago
Burn the Bitch

She messed up big time and now she is caugh. Tell her bye.

LilacQueen15LilacQueen15about 4 years ago

Be sure and reverse the vasectomy!

Just_WordsJust_Wordsalmost 4 years ago
Busted!

This one struck and unexpected cord. Her unwillingness to move with a better job, despite not having a meaningful job herself, along with the pregnancy makes her queen bitch. I really found myself hating this character, so I guess means you wrote it well and very believable.

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
One hell of a way to get caught....

This is another story where you have to guess the ending and that takes all of the fun out of reading a story...knowing what that her cheating was caught and what she feels know is the end of this story...........

peter944peter944about 3 years ago

Seems like there should be more, what happened next?

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

It was hushed and jumbled. For me the storyline was barely understandable. The ending was missing. 2*

iameaseliameaselalmost 3 years ago

Well that was pure idiocy.

nixroxnixroxover 2 years ago

5 stars - I liked this story.

It does not need a better ending than it already demonstrates.

She certainly could not get pregnant by her husband.

Neither one of them had any clue how their lives were going to be drastically affected.

This has got to be one of the worst ways to end a marriage and friendships.

26thNC26thNCover 2 years ago

Reading again, trying to make sense of this. Who done it.

AnonymousAnonymous11 months ago

The writing is very disjointed. It was hard to follow and understand what was going on. There also is a lot of information in here that doesn't seem relevant.

AnonymousAnonymous10 months ago

The story is quite jumbled, but I feel the last linea should be: I stood up and said, "You will be hearing from my lawyer." I paid the bill and left the restaurant, turning off my cell phone, and went to a hotel where I spent a restless night. She was going to learn how much pain I could inflict upon her, now that she has shown me how little she loved me and honored our vows. I was going to insist on DNA testing of our children now too. By morning, I had a list of things that I needed to accomplish as soon as possible, lawyer, bank, HR, life insurance, my IRA, the house rental and a dozen other things.

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