All Comments on 'Cathal, The Fairy Knight Ch. 01'

Good Start. Write more. You'll probably be better after writing again and again. Then you would be an awesome writer. Right now, you're pretty good, but have plenty of room for improvement.

A few typos, ("night" instead of "knight" for example.) but overall a very promising beginning to what I hope is a much longer story.

My forte is also fantasy/science fiction, and I can see in this beginning a realm that I would love to explore further through your words.

I liked this and think you have a good story idea, even though I usually like more sex, I am bad, but your story idea is very good. See ya, Lisa.