by Deadly Joker
You are one sick puppy!
This story is missing something, I just can't figure out what!
It's missing a REAL plot!!! It sounds like it's written by some kind of "gansta'" wannabe! It's PATHETIC!!! Let me spell that out for the person who wrote it...Story=d-u-m-b!
Forget the criticism. I thought your story was excellent. Don't worry about prudes.
I know what it's missing, him fucking her pussy and cumming in her womb. Possibly even her getting pregnant (by him). That would make the story even better, imo.
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Let's see, plot - none, action - buggery only, story elements - none, point - none, boredom - high.
Avoid this pathetic attempt at literature if possible. If it's not possible to avoid it, then treat it as it deserves to be treated and turn your computer off before it polutes the electrons in your display.
Obviously the mental midgets who posted negative comments don't realize this story was a satirical slap at the infantile obsession with incest stories on this website. And who would argue with the story's premise/theme that two heads are better than one?
the guy that wrote this is indeed one sck puppy thank god hes in iraq serving the us for everyone t
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How many ways can you say "ass"? This was dumb. I didn't even wanna think about the gay side of your hero.
Sorry, I'm with those who are critical of this story. The only word that comes to mind is "lame".
good story. to the point. fuck everyone else. Especially those homophobic motherfuckers (paradox intended). Who can be critical when they're reading incestual stories.
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What a waste of the 5mins it took me to read! I could have been doing something constructive like wanking in the bathroom with a handfull of razorblades!
What a crock of shit, a total waste of time.It was so un real. Do us ALL a Favour fall under a truck so we never have to read this shit again!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
fuck those ass holes that think it was a piss poor story. they read it tho. like where they had two cocks in her ass. wow another in her pussy and het mouth to male it four fucking her at the same time.
nice story. forget those retards who are trashing your story. keep up the writing , real or not regardless it WAS a good story. only thing maybe a little longer.
mom and i were lovers for 21 yrs. the thing we both loved was me fucking her great ass. try it sometime,nothing better. a motherfucker
this story fucking sucks i have read some lame shit but this is by far the worst fuck this fucking shitty ass story
There was absolutely no build up to the incest. You started the sex IN THE INTRO paragraph, it would have been better if you gave the descriptions first to get an idea of the surroundings beforehand, rather than in the 6th paragraph.
Mmmmmm what a delicious tale of sissy incest to have such a whore mommy loving her ass pumped full of her baby's hot sticky sissy cum and raising him to be such a sissy faggot., Please do continue, honey, I love your writing style
WHAT IS THIS CRAP?? -------> So, I don't know and don't really care if you've learned any lesson from this little filthy story. But I know I'm going to tap my mom's ass again at least once, maybe twice, before I get to bed. Can you say the same for yourself?"
ABSOLUTELY FUCKING NOT saying the "same"! What a waste of time! I presume you are Bi-Polar and go between your 'good erotica' and this 'sick crap' about balling 'momma' in her ass? She would be one sick bitch to "swallow" a story like this; enough already!
I SUPPOSE NEXT you will be SUCKING OFF YOUR DAD? He surely would NOT want to fuck Yo'Momma'! Whatta pig! OINK-A-FUCKIN-MUNDO!
Hey great job to who made this. I love to think of my mom naked with me. This story really captured the true meaning of mother son love. Every son should fuck their mother to show them their love.
One of the best ass fucking stories yet ..keep up with the good work
my kinda story. Straight and to the point. Such a cock slut. I had to pull one off reading it.
Thinking about fucking my mom's ass really turns me on. The story was missing a little but I still enjoyed it. I would have liked a little more ass to mouth action. I've been ass fucked and then sucked his cock. I keep my ass well douched so it's pretty clean. My girlfriend takes it in the ass too. She loves having 3 cocks fuck her at the same time while one or two guys suck her tits. She's had as many as 6 guys working on her at the same time. It was an awesome sight. I was fucking her face so I had a great view of everything. We are both whores and we both love it.
Learn the fine art of subtlety. THere was no building up, no anticipation. I quit reading after three sentences