My wife and I had our son off and
out of the house for about two months
running around naked and finally the
house to just the two of us and
my niece got detained "grin" we wound
up raiseing her two little ones
a 2 month old and 2 years old so it
started all over again
hince: My Erotic Tails "Blizzard"
nice poem Tung~
and wonderful memories
oh yea and erotic
and affectionate, the tone of this enjoyable poem. I have trouble trying to get the word "soothe" to fit; it's like a rough spot in an otherwise polished gem. Thanks!
I tend to agree about "soothe". I only knew it as a verb. I would also say that this is an erotic poem. One of soft and soothing warmth.
I'd change soothe to soothing--it sounds more soothing that way. :)
What I really enjoyed was the hurried, long lines to the change of one or two words, the transition from conveluded to simple, burdened to sensuous.
You listed this as non-erotic, but I would beg to differ. a very pretty piece, more complex than first glance would lead one to believe.
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