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The Vacation Ch. 02

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by wagoneer8801/22/05

Not up to snuff

Peter,
your stories of Peter's sufferings (and pleasures) at the hands - lol - of his wife Lisa are superb. But this time, the story at times rambles away from the erotic, and the grammar and punctuation are sufficiently faulty to detract from the 'stroke value'.
I hate to ask, but had you had a drink or two when you wrote this installment?
Look, as a writer of erotica, if I ever tried it, my talent is close to zero. But I am very good at the mechanics of language: spelling, grammar, word choice, punctuation and the like. If you would ever like a free proofreading of a story, try me.
God, I wish Lisa would be unfaithful with a poolside Adonis, but I know that won't happen.
Keep up (lol) the good work.

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