by Rumple Foreskin
A good writing and story start. I do feel there's a LOT of room for more to the story but it is still good as is.
Gave this a "5" for enterprise, but it really is merely a tease to a potentially much longer story.
Very lyrical prose and engaging characters. Would like to see more of them, too. ~Imp
You truly are a talented and inspiring writer - your story was a pleasure to read. I am envious of your skills!
Hey Rumple,
Nice story! Sweet with a real feel. I love the long pauses necessary for Willie to think things through. I have a sweet sister who talks like that - It was all so familiar!
-Logo
very touching and well written~
good luck and happy lovers day
You pulled it off well, Rump, but where's the rest? It kind of reads like a first chapter. Is there more on the way?
Deservedly 5-bombed but it is incomplete. You've got Bertie and the Drones club, but is Etta Jeeves? If not, she has to be a 'mistake'-the girl always is.
Not sure PG would have'exited' a car park mind.
This is the beginning, now give us more. Your command of the English language amazes me. (In a good way) :) Good Luck!
Leave me hanging! Why you rat. I'll 5 bomb you anyway, but now you have to continue!
Great writing! Loved "logic was illogical" Witty and charming. Wodehouse would be proud.
"...The automobile in question was a dilapidated model rich in years..."
I can so relate. LOL. thoroughly enjoyed. Thanks, RG!
The spirit is excellent, the grammar needs a little bit of work--extra commas and such.
Nevertheless, a fun read.
Loved the prose, certainly don't want to hear of apologies!
Well done.
You should've warned us! Oh, wait! You did.
Nice work, Rumps. ~Imp
But I added one for Willie being such a great character. Was a little disappointed that there wasn't a second page of antics though.
Good work. :)
You're absolutely right. There's no sex anywhere in this story at all. What it is, is well-written and engaging. ;)
Outstanding! This was my favorite among all the Valentine's Day submissions. Add me to the crowd that will nag and pester you until you give us MORE!
I truly loved "Willie and the Brain," because I’m a Plumhead to the core, which, as you know, is the pits.