Your poem have been mentioned in the New Poems tread at the poetry forum.
You have a great ear for language. I think your poem has a natural musical rhythm. I love the subtle internal rhyme and assonanace, too. I really look forward to reading more by you. :)
I like this a lot and feel you could tighten it a lot by cutting some word baggage. Nice feelings.
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