by the_last_high
Very nicely written,one of the most erotic storys I've read.A few spelling mistakes,but they didn't really interrupt the flow of what must be most mens fantasy.Also liked the possibility of a happy ending!Look forward to the next story.
The best written story on this we site. An author wist superior talent who should be a top selling author if able to write about more than just sex scenes...which are great.
Remarkably sensitive and clear with great detail of setting and characters. Extremely well written! I'm very impressed with your originality and touch.
What more to say - except more than erotic and sensual - truly entertaining! Then to ask for more from a wonderful Story Teller - Thanks with best Regards
I was trying to withhold my peak while going along....
and alas! i came at the 4th page...
great work...
Best story I've read so far.
The story was good, but the writing was over the top to the point of distraction. Simplify. Simplify. Simplify. You have a tendency to use five words where one would do the job just fine, and while sometimes that can be a good thing in this case it just looks like you sat with a thesaurus trying to use as many five dollar words as possible.
loved it. I believe you. Hope you Write more. please tell us if you ever get to see cat again!
Being a writer, I think you have an excellent piece of work. Good rise, climax and resolution.
Wow. You have great story telling talent. Keep honing it honey. ^.- You COULD simplify it, but... eh, I liked it the way it was. Beautiful, touching, explicit. ^.- Damn good! I came 3 times! And I'm a single-time-comer. LOL. Thanks!!
Well done. You wrote about every young (and older man's dream). Very, very enjoyable
Amazing! I cannot believe how hot, tender, and exciting this story was...all rolled into one. Way to go! Can't wait to read more submissions.
An overal great story, and despite it's length it keeps entertaining the reader. Blizzards never were so hot.
An example of excelence for all the writers on this site.
Hey brother you have a great first time remember it forever and you just might get you a little Italian to be yours forever.
This was the best erotic story I have ever read. You have excellent story-telling talent. This story was just so different from the others I have read. I loved the emotion in it. There were also a lot of funny moments were you said exactly what I was thinking. I hope you and Cat get together. Wow!
This is without a doubt the best story I have ever read! I am blown away. As soon as I thought it could not get any better, it goes to another level, but in a classy way, not rushed. After the first page I was so pleased to know I had six more pages of this to go!! And to top it off, the writing is exceptional, so easy to read. I found myself laughing out loud three or four times and sitting back in disbelief even more.. ha! Congratulations on a story I will remember.
ILOVED thins story i read it like 20 time it is the best story i have ever and think i will ever read. Yoy are a VERY talitened wrighter.:)
I love how things went along and built up along the way. The tenison was every strong with each growing encounter and I was willing to be beileve if was happening. Just the card game thing was a bit over the top, but everything else was very, very good.
I can see why people wouldn't believe your story, but I don't see why it's not possible. Some people just get lucky, or very lucky in your case. Real or fiction, very good story and keep up the good work.
read it twice a had same reaction - cam in my shorts. great job.
Wow! This is a wonderful story. It has a nice balance between hot sex and romantic love-making. I hope your next story is just as romantic.
Have you ever thought of a career as being a writer...i am absolutely in a loss of words. If a word best describes that story its...wow!
Thought this was an absolutely amazing story. The build up was completely worth all of it. I'm extremely intrigued with those bonds that happen (like with Cat and the Guy). Keep up the writing!
it was good no doubt but long. soooo long. i did find myself skipping parts but once i read the whole thing, i had to look back at it and just go wow. that was good.
Extremely good story but 7 long pages!
great though please write more you have talent!
Awesome job man, I really liked it and hope you write more maybe a sequal? Also you have to be one of the luckiest men on this planet!
i enjoyed the story very much...dunno if i believe you or not..i mean three girls!! lol
errrm, whats your phone number plz..hehe ;)
so you preferred Cat all the way seemingly..ciao!
Amazing story, I really liked the 1st person perspective. The words you used to describe were very elequent, you do have a career in writing to be sure.
I also liked the end, the bonds that actualy formed added a nice touch(no pun intended).
this is without doubt the best story i have ever read... omg i came 7 times reading it.. fucking amazing, man!
It was good, but when you think about it, if this actually happened, wouldn't you be breaking their word by posing the story for all to read?
Awesome read! Very well written, with an abundance of rich words. Only one point I would like to point out... I am french , english and german, and would just like to correct you on one point: "Dairy ere". Correctly, it is written "Dèrrière". Other then that, the best read I've had on this website!
Kudos to you,
Cheers,
Martyn
man , this was kool .
Njoyed it emmensley
My keyboard is a mess.
Thx
that was m master peice. i have read bestselling novels that werent as well writen and articulate as that. you are officialy the best author on this site bar none, Fact.
That was clearly one of the best submissions on the site and I've read a lot of them. Masterfull storytelling that keeps the reader spellbound throughout. I tend not to read many of the longer submissions, because they have a tendency to drag. This story has the perfect blend of passion, plot and beautiful character development. You managed a great story out of a very limiting setting. I would suggest a sequel, but unless you can replicate this powerfull performance, don't ruin it like many authors here have.
I wanna be stranded somewhere now! but i have a feeling such luck is rare... Write more!
WOW! I couldn't resist rubbing my pussy to gushing satisfaction during this read. Truly, your story was excellent!
I couldn't help but rubbing my clit through the whole thing. It was amazing!!!
I can verify that this story was totally true - I was the next person to lodge in that cabin, and you guys left it in a terrible state - crisp packets and pizza boxes everywhere, I'm shocked.
I have spent a lot of time reading on this site and this is one of the BEST submissions i have ever read i tend to like the longer stories because it gives you time ot get to know the characters and usually the sex scenes are better. great job 5 stars!
Wow, that's all i have to say. This was by far THE single best story i have ever read in my life. It slowly developed the characters without seeming to drag on and on like some of the other stories that are 7 pages long. You had me captivated from the get-go. Some say, oh this is fake, if it is man, i would love to have your imagination...LOL and if it's not you've got three hot, beautiful, exotic ladies that you keep in touch with...need i say more.Even if this was a personal expirence, it takes a special person to blend the words together the way you do, a seemingly fluid transition from page to page, more importantly adding the personal realistic perspective of the entire expirence. All in all, MINDBLOWING!!! I wish the scale went higher 101/100
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Out of the countless number of submissions I've read on this site, this is by far the most memorable. Fluent discription, perfect imagery, and an uncanny ability to make the characters spring to life before our eyes. I could imagine myself in your shoes (or lack thereof) throughtout the entire story. If there were more stories like this there would simply be no reason for porn. Thank you for letting us experience your dream come true.
Out of the many first-time stories I've read here, this is BY FAR the best. Fiction or not, it's an excellent, excellent piece that you should be very proud of. Every guy's fantasy come true!
I came 3 times reading this, with my husband sleeping behind me on the bed!
Whew~!
what a great story, not crude but sensual, not smutty but erotic, flowing description and incredible sensual tension. Thank you!
This story is by far the best story I have read on this site. I am having to read it in parts because I want to savor every erotic minute of it. Please write more :)
This is one of the most well written stories I have read on Literotica. I would recommend it for anyone who enjoys a good erotic story. Well done!!!!
This is the best story I've read on this site to date! Fantastic work!
A SUPER READ! Whoa! I'm exhausted. Even when I was 18 this level of fantasy would have been beyond me. And I did know a supermodel, too. Thanks for a GREAT STORY!! Winter and the mountains are heaven to me, too.
I am so impressed- this was by far the best Literotica story I have ever read. The combination of sensuality and lust with a little dash of emotion was flawlessly balanced. I'm not surprised you haven't written another one; this must have taken quite a while and it would be hard to top it. Fantastic work!
Honestly the best story i have ever read! The fantasy is at its best and is everybodys dream! Also, to bring about the emotion of love yet in a truly amazing sex scene gives a great feeling of being dirty and yet truly innocent love!
This is one of if not the best bit of literotica that I've read in a long time. From begining to end it just pulls you in leaves you both hot, horny and wanting more. I'm hoping that the_last_high makes a continuation of this.
This was almost without a doubt the best story I have read on this site, perfect sensuality and humour, the contrast of characters was fluid and subtle yet so clearly perfect to the very core, I wish that I could write as well as you. Finally, I really look forward to reading any further submissions from you, fantastic!
This was almost without a doubt the best story I have read on this site, perfect sensuality and humour, the contrast of characters was fluid and subtle yet so clearly perfect to the very core, I wish that I could write as well as you. Finally, I really look forward to reading any further submissions from you, fantastic!
Nicely told...three gorgeous girls...sex every which way...BUT...no way in HELL does an 18 year-old cock stay soft for longer than 10 seconds when it finds itself in bed with naked, attractive females...not even in San Francisco, LOL
Excellent story, but what kind of dimwitted women go out into a cabin in the middle of winter and don't bring extra blankets, covers, pajamas, etc.? Especially considering they must know full well what winters in the Alps are like, since they live in Europe! Maybe if it had been a cabin full of American girls, I'd believe it, but come on.
This story is obviously not based on reality. But thanks for telling a story that is exactly like my best fantasy. For that, I still give it 100%
All I can say is, you lucky bastard. I believe you though. Someone has to, right?
Your story is awesome and an inspiration to virgins everywhere, even though the rest of us will never be that lucky
This is the best story I have read on this site. Period.
Ah hell, hot, but obviously just a story. Amazing how an inexperienced virgin over the years had learned not to touch a clit without lubrication. A few other places where the protagonist showed experience rather than inexperience, but still a Great Fantasy.
You started off well enough with some good ideas, but tried to cram far too much into it. In doing so, the story lost its appeal. I quickly became bored with the non-stop sex.
Your grammar and spelling aren't very good. You need to work on both of them a lot more.
You try to describe too much detail. Sometimes less is more. And you need to encourage the reader to use his or her imagination. Don't try to do too much.
One minute all four of them were huddled under blankets trying to warm each up, and then the next minute the boy and one of the girls are on top of the blankets. This was not plausible, because in real life, the temperature would have been well below freezing, and both of them would have suffered hypothermia within a very short time.
Extremely hot!! Loved it and u do a very good job at describing it.I believe you but I think you exadurated a bit on all the horny-ness and was it just chance that all the girls where bi-sexual?Overall a very good story =)
best story eva!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
cant beleive this
will you make another one of these storys?????
Amazing story! A great read.
On a small side note, i love when people comment on here about "grammar and spelling" and can't even spell correctly themselves. Don't take their "reviews" seriously. If they can't type a five sentence comment without messing up, how can they have the right to criticize a 7 page story?
but, it seemed as though for an 18 year old who had never been kissed before he seemed a little demanding of these women......
don't get me wrong though, it was incredible
The ending makes it seem like it's a true story. Is it? Stupid question maybe but whatevs. Amazing story.
story was amazing to say the least. Loved the detail you put into the story as a whole. And I believe you. Hope you get to see cat again.
This story is truly stunning, both beautifully written and emotionally stirring (among other things.;)..)
The characters are wonderfully described and developed and the setting only added to the atmosphere of an excellent story.
so thanks from (I imagine) everyone who has read this story.
An amazing story like this cannot be made up even by the most vivid of imaginations. i fully believe you and salute you. not many men are so deviously lucky.