by fanficnut
I'm sorry but this has to be the worse story ever told on literotica. Please come back with something more real.
Actually, I thought the idea of the story was amusing and promising. Unfortunately the language barrier got in the way. Perhaps you should write your stories in your native language, because (and someone has to tell you this) what you're writing is NOT english. The WORDS seem to be english but the sentences definitely ARE NOT.
At least I have the balls to leave my name when I tell you suck. But you suck. I won't nail you on typos cus I make em too, lots of em. But your charachter didn't feel anything like Jessica Rabbit and your writing just isn't detailed enough at all. Still the concept was great and I'm sure you're getting lots of readers so you've got one half of your job done already, attracting readers, now you just have too hook em.
I liked the story, but it could have been more. Very creative part. Suggest you redo it and make it more interesting. Goodluck
This was amazing do another 1 please the story was brill jessica rabbit is sexuall and her tits ohhhhhh I jerk off still over her n look up websites n watch her in tht movie dancing n jerk off to it I can't help it I wish she was real no one knows what I would do to her titty fuck first though defo
The grammar was awful. There was no real structure. No in depth explanations and descriptions. Bad writing.
You don't know basic punctuation, or grammar at a middle-school level.