All Comments on 'Photo Shoot'

Excellent short story and very hot. I hope that you do a longer sequel to it very soon.

I really liked this story, but it was a bit short. Keep it up, stories with a normal guy and a group of cheerleaders is always hot ;)

Please use the plural form of breasts. I find the use of the singular form detracts from the story. Otherwise it was a good story.

Nice work! I wondered if he would get together with the "shy one". It was pleasant the way it worked out! Keep writing.

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Sorry mate, but it really was. They all just happen to have massive breasts and he has a giant cock. It was like watching a C-grade Hollywood movie.

I agree with the person who said that the gramatical errors, esp. using the word "breast" instead of "breasts" took away from the story. I thought the guy having a 10" cock was a bit much to believe as well.

Mmm, perfect, except that ALL of the organs were 2 large! No Cheerleading team is popu8ed by C-cup or greater girls! In fact I found the 10" cock easier 2 beLIEve than the complete massive Boob popul8ion. Keep these things realistic please. The most realistic part was that the shy girl could deep-throat. That part rang very TRUE! LOL otw, it was a massive stretch of the imagin8ion.

I DID sport an erection, though. Keep writing, please!

:D Schwing.

Great story and can't wait for more

Excellent writing! Would like to see continuation of the story, maybe a marriage between Steve & Amanda?

This was a great story. It would be great if you could continue it. As far as breast sizes, given that its a fantasy, you should make them whatever size you choose. I liked them the way you described them, so kudos. Just please continue!

Great story that needs more chapters. After 16 years I expect none will be coming, which is why I only gave it a 4. It really needs more