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She's Stubborn

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by Anonymous

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by sophia jane03/03/05

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beautiful, as always, Angeline.

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by impressive03/03/05

Love this!

Very nice work. ~Imp

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by WickedEve03/03/05

:)

this falling awakened
like a poem oft read

Love those lines. Very nice poem, A.

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by 03/03/05

Once more.............

...........a sweet, sad truth in poem-form. You know how to phrase your feelings beautifully, Ange.

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by Syndra Lynn03/03/05

Wonderful read!

that ours was not
a blind leap over the ledge
of reason where fingers slip
from dreams that will not be,
but built with waking days

So well written. Just lovely.

Syn

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by Anonymous03/03/05

It reminds me...

of the wife and myself. This is really powerful if your
world is tied to the one you want and need. I'm still working on the title, but I love the poem, my favorite
verse was the third, but the whole poem was loved. sandspike

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by My Erotic Tale03/03/05

Tender

Tender touches of the soul~
In your poem it shows!

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by twelveoone03/04/05

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uneven
these lines do not fit well with the flow of the others.
"corporeal not contemplated
but consumed privately,
consummated with no one"
cliche
"the breadth and depth
of hearts--"

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by jthserra03/04/05

The conversational tone

worked nicely in some areas, but seemed to slip too much into prose in a few areas. It recovered nicely though and flowed smoothly to a wonderful completion. I love:

"...and how close
the space we've made
for two."

Nicely done,

jim : )

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by 03/04/05

Ohh

I most definitely enjoyed reading this. I just felt the lines were a bit uneven, which caused the flow to be a little rocky in places. I hope you appreciated the honesty as much as I enjoyed your poem.

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by flyguy6903/05/05

I read it thrice

every time it got more nice!

I loved the distinction drawn between corporeal truth and speculation; a womnderful poem.

Fly

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