All Comments on 'A Lovers BJ'

Well written and described... let this not be your last!

I enjoyed this story -- up to a point. The topic is good; it's short and to the point; it makes a decent story.

But I was very turned off by the mechanical mistakes. The first paragraph seemed the most in need of attention. When I read "barley covering the tips of her breasts," I had an uncontrollable mental image of oats on her nipples, and that was not-so-strangely off-putting. *Please* edit more carefully (you can arrange for that through Literotica if you like), and then your stories will be hot indeed!

It was all good, till I saw your pic.....then I blew my load

Finely written, but the ending seems hurried. To make it more erotic, I expect much more of a buildup to the orgasm, and more about what happens during the cumming, as well as more description about the aftermath (some "clean-up" touches would be nice).

I liked it ofc dear, but then again i am rather biased ;), will see you soon, keep up the good work love.

Well described, kind of repetitive, but overall a very hot BJ story and you should continue to write.

great romantic writing