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there are a few tiny technical errors, ie, forgotten punctuation, however...this is a strong work..I love your style, the repitition. and it is like you stole into my own mind and wrote out my soul...love LOVE the last stanza...excellent work :)

I left a comment already, but i had to come back to this one part...

She’s ashes and dust.

She needs you to love her.

She asks like a beggar

but never believes.

that is just so ...perfect

She's desolation and doubt

and soul - oh so barren ~~

So sad~~

Love affair reduced to Ashes ~ memories remain alive to haunt the future days.

what fates have befallen. TK U MLJ LV NV

This is very powerful, and it tells a story of her that we believe, and that we feel.