I adore your opening paragraph, the humour is fantastic, unfortunately the rest of the story isn't as zingy. I enjoyed it but felt it missed a bit of the originality you found in your opening sentances.
Your usual high standards. Had no problem visualizing the entire scene in detail.
You reall DO love to fuck, and it shows!
You developed the story line nicely and set the scenes from the start in a way that allowed visualization without the burden of too much description. It was a very pleasing change from some of the other pieces I read today. The character's interest in buying and inspecting the costume allowed for a natural detailed description where I've seen others awkwardly try to fit such detail into the middle of a steamy scene. The only odd phrasing I saw (and it may be a common term elsewhere) was the description of a cock that "sprung up and down" instead of bobbing.
Thank you for the pleasure of your writing. I'll be looking for more of your work.
More, More This is great stuff!
Hot and Sexy!! From start to finish, I was captured!! Mmmmh, leaves you wanting more!!Fantastic!!
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