All Comments on 'Heating Up the Hot Tub Ch. 01'

Write fast!!!!

hurry and get part 2 out here

get to part 2 quickly....teaser

Please

Too effen short. Be nice, dude.

...young teenage girls just aren't as aggressive, and naughty as these three lovelies. But then again...this is just fantasy...and very good fantasy at that...

i have to disagree on the earlier comment even though this is a fantasy story i have to admitt to the aggressiveness of younger females me myself is 36 and i've had 2 of my niece's girlfriends approach me and come straight out and tell me what they wanted to do to me, and what they wanted for me to do for them in the bed!!

Very hot start...can't wait to read more!

you're as big a tease as the three girls!

"I used to have a much more physically demanding job then the one I have now," should be "I PREVIOUSLY had a much more physically demanding job THAN the one I have now." There are far too many misspellings and other errors in this story. Why write if you do not try to write well? Use an editor.

There are a few grammatical errors, most notably the use of "then" instead of "than". However, on balance, this is a reasonably well-written story. The dialog does not require a huge leap of faith to be believable, which is unusual for Literotica. My only real issue is that this story lacks any real heat. Perhaps that is in chapter 2...