Bobbie nearly blew it, until Don Juan showed what an empty package he was. Masterful job of telling how she reevaluated her thinking that her life wasn't "fun" anymore.
and like any great story it stimulates minds.lots of different opinions of just what this lady represents as a result of her actions. saint or sinner? Loving wife or cheater?
my own two cents worth are that she's no saint. after the fact she may realize just what she almost did and is thankful that it didn't transpire, but she doesn't get any high marks for her own actions. as written in the story she made a conscious decision to commit adultry,made plans for him to come to her room,and made a preemtive call to her husband.she was fully committed to having sex with this Don. it was only poor verbal skills by him that stopped this from happening.its was only after the 'turn off' that she developed a sense of guilt and realized ' what she would be looking back at at seventy '.
i don't view her as a bad person. everyone has low periods in their life and can make poor decisions.sometimes they are cruel and destructive and never recovered from and at other times you get lucky and get another chance to do the right thing.
as usual another great story!
I liked your story of her near brush with loosing her marriage. She's not perfect but still kept her vows. I thank you for the story.
a story unto themselves. It would be interesting to have a sociologist write a learned essay on this phenomenom. At times it seems like the comments take on a life of their own, generating ever more comments with the story somewhat laid by the wayside. (I, with an attempt at humor, tried this with "Get Back" but I would really like to see someone make a serious attempt at this!)
On the story I can't fault her for her thoughts; none of us could maintain a relationship if all of our thoughts were transparent. Yeah, she almost screwed up but she realized there are things more inappropriate than the use (or misuse) of language!
Boredom is evil!
A last bit of wisdom: "Comments are neither good nor bad, they just are!"
By the way, I did like the story, a lot. You were one of my first bookmarked authors. The malapropisms were brilliant!
this and I absolutely loved it, very funny and wonderful misuse of the English language. You get an A+ from me.
The wife is so full of bull shit if she thinks she is being a good wife to her husband and a good mother to her kids she needs a shrink to get her head turned around she is cheating on her husband and she should know it dont treat him like a wimp and a cockold.
A little story with huge potential.
As I laugh myself silly with this quickie, I have to conclude that I'll take wit over brawn any day.
Thank you, what a pleasure it was to read this little story. You made my day. I'm still smiling. You did not only entertain, but gave us something to think about. Great job!
Let he who is without sin, cast the first stone. How many of us, married or single, have looked at someone and thought "Wow, he/she is hot, what would it be like to have my way with him/her?" AS some readers have said, we are all subject to temptation, we may even set up the situation but that doesn't mean we will fall. We are human, we will make mistakes, sometimes we will make the right decision for the right reason, sometimes for the wrong reasons, that's the luck of the draw. One reader said that "It is the difference between shooting a person with a gun and being stopped by a bus and then arrested by cop before you could pull the trigger." (Paraphrase) I disagree. It is being stopped by a bus, then realizing that what you are doing is wrong, dismantling the weapon, putting it in the trunk of your car. Yes, you might take it out again; but that is for the future. Thankyou for this story of a near miss.
Superb thinking man's story that touches a lot of bases and asks a lot of questions for which there are no certain answers. It's good fiction because the prose is well-crafted, the characters believable (though Mr. Malaprop was too good to be true :), and the resolution of the plot credible. Whether you agree with the ideas presented by the author or not, there is no denying the fact that "he gotcha" -- he made you think. If that's not good fiction, I don't know what is. Thank you, rpsuch, for a story very well told.
I don't think you should write anymore.
Probably a real experience for many women. I loved the malaprop humor, but wht got me laughing out loud was the comment "Terrible" by anonymous. Don't read anymore rpsuch stories, knucklehead.
...the comments are even better.
Nice argument we've got going here. Is she a saint or a slut? Somewhere in between, like most of us, I guess, but I'm still a bit surprised by the 'saint' crowd. It's as if they went into the story expecting a gender reversal of 'Midlife crisis', so that's what they're commenting on. 'She changed her mind,' they say. No, she didn't. Read it again. She didn't change her mind about cheating, she just lost her appetite for her lover. Her remorse (at least at first) doesn't so much say 'oh no, I almost cheated' as 'oh no, I almost cheated with the wrong guy'. That doesn't strike me as particularly sincere.
Of course, she isn't as bad as some of the women from other RPSuch stories ('Fifth place', 'Kent Clark or Superman', 'Wimp', and 'Too Far') and indeed the majority of the women in these stories, but that doesn't make it right.
That doesn't mean she's Hitler, of course. Her internal monologue at the end points to her being a usually decent person, who lost her way, but is on her way back. She was lucky no damage accrued, but she was not an upstanding wife who stood up to temptation and refused to cheat.
What more can I say. Where I cum from every-one is great!
Why am I reading these storeys - to get on up high (top storey) or what?
No - I think I read this because I am filthy minded and now I came accross a writer who is sharp and refreshingly clean and who will never pick up a STP what's to say AIDES, Gonaway or sightlust.
Here you have another comment worth reading - I write for Ezinearticles!
What if he didn't have the STD? After the first kiss, she admits this is the excitement she is missing. They keep kissing and she doesn't have second thoughts. Where is the saint? It was only a matter of circumstance that she didn't cheat on her husband. It was great that she had her epiphany and came to realize what was important. Unfortunately, for me, she already cheated on her husband. How does she think he would have reacted if he walked in on her in Don's arms? I don't think we would have had the happy ending.
she's lucky she didn't do it and realised in time. An hour later and she would never forgive herself.
Finally a woman who actual thinks and considers what she's doing.
I enjoyed the story. I cracked-up over the STP comment.
I guess it's true that sex is mostly in the head, I mean the big head not the little head, although ... after reading one of your other stories about what you learn on this site I could be wrong.
I liked the ending
She gets seduced, and then has to listen to a warning before she gets put to bed. I think the only thing that saved her was the warning. I have always thought that the women that one would meet on a buisness trip would be STD breeding factories. Why wouldn't a woman feel the same way about the men she meets. Don was hitting on several women, so that along should have sent her running. In the end, she got the wakup call, but nearly too late.
The only thing that saved her from damaging her marriage and family was this looser's STD...or in his words a "STP". Nevermind that he was mind numbingly stupid that was all overlooked because he gave her compliments. Sure she finally had her lightbulb moment in the end but she was ready and willing to go there before he dropped his little bomb.
who said that "It's better to be lucky than....:" I forget what comes after "than," but you kow what I mean. What I mean to say is that the lady sure got lucky in her choice of a guy to fuck around with.
Great story to draw so many intelligent comments. I stick with another writer's comment. Cheaters cheat because they decided to and they can when they want to. I think it is always decided they will before it actually occurs. Everything else before or after the actual event is just rationalization or dialogue from the writer. Most marriages that work do so because the cheater does not get caught and doesn't do it too often. That way there is no hurtful confrontation that forces the betrayed to take action or not because of wounded feelings.
This wife did not get caught whether she mean't to go all the way or not. We all come close to doing the same thing in our marriages...
and witty (and wise) "Loving Wives" story I've encountered on Literotica. You fixed the deck by setting up a Mr. Malaprop to bring her back to her own self-respect and self-re-perception, but it was all the more asmusing for that. I have to rate this a five out of five (as very rarely, even Shakespeare or Faulkner wouldn't achieve that every time with me, all-in-all), and I regret that the system won't let me register it
If the guy that the wife picked up was more like Warren Beaty, what then?
Sorry, but she spoke to her husband and enquired about her kids, moments before Romeo made it to her room. And yet she still opened the door for him.
Lucky for her, Romeo was dumb enough to behave just stupid enough for her to achieve her epiphany.
So let me ask you, if he was Warren Beaty instead? No, your writing was excellent and pretty much at the top of it game here. The characters you wrote about however were not.
Her fidelity is not based on all the things that make marriages last. It's based on dumb luck.
a cheating bitch.
All I can say is, she thought about it once and decided not to. When she thinks about it again, She just might.
his cornhole reamed, he smoked the meaty cock, betrayed!
She had a chance and did the right thing. She's a better wife, woman and human being than any of the commenters on this story. They desperately need to feel like real men because they can't find jobs, they can't see their flacid little pee-pee's underneath their middle-aged guts and no woman wants them because they're such pathetic losers.
Seems people are forgetting that a long term marriage can (not necessarily will) fall into a routine where neither party is communicating enough. This lady should have been talking with her husband about these things long before it got to this point, but fortunately she realized what she was jeopardizing before it was too late.
Never start taking your spouse for granted and never let them take you for granted. That way lies 'loving' wives and husbands.
She dodged a bullet here and she may have scared herself enough to realize what almost happened.
But if the guy wasn't a complete idiot she may not have come to her senses before it was too late.
She got lucky and she was smart enough to know it.
How about that an intelligent woman. You don't see many of those here. Refreshing!
My second time reading this and truly a favorite. If all of us married folks were honest, we have all been tempted and even fantasized about an affair. I am fairly sure it is human nature. She nearly got herself into big trouble. I have nearly gotten myself into big trouble. Fortunately, she took time to reflect and weigh the value of her family against the potential risk. Reason and devotion won out in this case, but I am smart enough to know that reason is flawed. Did reason really win out, or was she simply lucky the guy couldn't stop taking his foot out of his mouth? Had he been a smooth talker, it is unlikely that she would have resisted the power of that first kiss. It too, reminds us that sometimes well reasoned and devoted people make mistakes. If not for her moral luck, we would be condemning her rather than applauding her.
even stopping short is another way to feed her own ego
They just can't stand it when the wife does NOT cheat so they just have to fantasize that not cheating is just as bad as cheating, anything just so they can keep hating on women. Why? Because no woman has ever wanted them? Why? Because they're inadequate, unlovable losers.
Those virgins read LW stories to server their closet-cuck fetish: not going to let the actual text of a story get in the way of a good read, spank, comment!
This is one of the best written stories here. At first I thought you had a couple of misspellings until I realized that Don Juan was an imbecile.
I would have like a bit more character development, but I understand that this story had a different intent. Bravo!
Professor S. I. Hayakawa must be rotating in his grave like a water turbine at the ignorance of people who say things such as: "Threatening to cheat is the same as doing it" as they lack the capacity, heck, the competency for semantic definition.
So, that map I drew on a napkin, with a crayon, is the same thing as the actual property it roughly describes?
If i write a fairy tale does that make me a fairy?
If I write a story about a ferryboat does that make me a ferryboat?
if I write a story about ignorant trolls would that make me one if the adolescent commentators on this site?
How did FinalStand put it “Standing in a Church does not make you a Good Christian, anymore than standing in a garage makes you an automobile.”
unfortunately it reminds me of too many stories and the comments in response to them here on Lit.
Well said rpsuch.
She didn't threaten to fool around, if he hadn't had herpes it was a done deal.
Still it was tongue in cheek and funny while making a point .
In a just world she would be penalized,but this is a story in which she got once in a million lucky.
still a beauty.
It wasn't a epiphany, it was a damn luck, the guy had genital herpes!!! If he was clear of that, no epiphany would save her from cheating and destroy her life for ever.
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission!
orBack to When I Look Back
orMore submissions by rpsuch.
More Comments (90 total): Page:
Edit comment orSubmit Comment
Comment posted successfully - click here to view it or write another.
Title of your comment:
Your public comment about When I Look Back:
Please type in the security codeYou may also listen to a recording of the characters.
Title your feedback:
Your feedback to rpsuch:
If you would like a response, enter your email address in this box:
Feedback sent successfully - click here to write another.
Login or Sign Up
All contents © Copyright 1998-2012. Literotica is a trademark. No part may be reproduced in any form without explicit written permission.
Terms Of Services|Report A Problem|Privacy
Password:Forgot your password?
Your current user avatar, all sizes:
You have a new user avatar waiting for moderation.
Select new user avatar:
Upload and save
User avatar uploaded successfuly and waiting for moderation.