All Comments on 'Ménage à Trois (Alone in a Hotel)'

without comment; score says...

and I say it's because of my comma. ;)

This was interesting to read after reading neo's poem on the same topic. Like a hooked carp? lol That's one way too look at it. Good poem.

~Syn

...in some other hotel room, an inadvertant audio-eur. This was well done. Thanks.

Tess

I really enjoyed the originality of this work:

quote:

As their headboard

bangs a jumbled tattoo,

I join them, gasping

like a hooked carp at our shared

moment of completion

Just what I love a writer seeks out to describe the ordinary in an original and extra ordinary vision...use of some great rhetorical weaving!

Du Lac

mentioned in the Sunday reviews...

Especially at this part,

"As their headboard

bangs a jumbled tattoo,

I join them, gasping

like a hooked carp at our shared

moment of completion."

it makes me reflect back sometime ago in hotel too. but i am not going to go any further with that. it's a perfect piece that many can relate too. it's the ending that i love the most as shown below:

I wonder if they

search for a tissue,

too.

***

nice job!!!......don