All Comments on 'Man To Wolf'

This story is mostly made up of information. There isn't any plotline or hot sex in it. Also, you repeat the information over in different sentance forms. I would reccomend getting a goal for your main character, and a reason for the antagonist of the story to want to not want the main character get his goal.

Use more paragraphs - reading on-screen, these large chunks of text are too much.