All Comments on 'The Family Ho!'

This is one of the worst stories, and I'm being generous when I call this effort a story, I have read on Literotica. It makes me wonder if English is the writer's primary language. It also makes me wonder if the writer is a minor, since everything about it is immature and inept.

There is no plot per se, no characters. It is so disengaging that it reads like a storyboard of a bad porn movie. It is a lame effort that leaves the reader totally limp.

If you aren't going to invest the effort to write better, or at least use a proofreader, please don't write anymore. It is just too painful to read.

daddy, daddy, daddy.

It's taking Sancho longer to read this thing because his English isn't so good.

Niether is yours.

Oh Man, oh Man, oh Man!

Was this written by a monkey?!?!? Every other word is 'daddy', and the storyline... or attempted storyline, since there wasnt one... is horrible. Also, take a breath, pause a second, fifty different actions took place in a five sentence paragraph. (Again, I am using 'sentence' and 'paragraph' loosely). You know you are supposed to be 18 to go on this site, go back to English class, learn how to write and come back when your 18.

hey i have loved reading your story so far. I can't wait to read some more and find out what happens next after june and her son come over to the house after lisa's mom calls her!!!!

Mmmn

LOL certainly fast paced