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Blurry...
...as you already said on the thread, but not terrible. Loved the poem and the concept. Keep it up! ~Minx
Reaching
Reading the poem I sense you are reaching for something and almost getting there. I like the short poem but I wouldn't include the title in the image and I would think more about the spatial layout of the actual text.
That criticism sounds like I'm destroying your work. I'm not, I like what you did. I'm rooting for you because I sense you are on the edge of achieving something. The poem and the image make sense together.
Enjoed it
Good work,
very interesting.
Thanks.
~ J
A slam dunk...
of a poem. Clearly illustrates the hits and misses of life.
clear shot.
The swooshes in the poem can only be the sound of a basketball slipping magically through the net. The picture of a basketball net adds to the ambiance of this poem.
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Those moments in life when everything comes together.
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Those moments in life when everything comes together.
AND YOU DONT HAVE TO DUNK
or hit a 3 pointer, TK U MLJ LV NV
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