All Comments on 'Buddy's Billiards'

by mesw

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AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
You need an editor

Someone who can help with some spellings, verb tenses and simple grammar.

If the billiards is to be part of the central theme, you need to pay more attention to describing each shot, missed or hit.

If you wish to simply have a conversation over a pool table - then do that, but ignore the game and focus on the conversation instead.

mixed signals and weak story here.

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