by wildsweetone
the words go nicely
with the illustration,
and i thought the simplicity
of it really worked well.
thanks.
~ J
This is a mood inducing image that might get stronger with even fewer words. I think I might have left out "outside" and "untouchable". Are they needed? Where else can the rain be, and if you are apart it is a given that you cannot touch.
I am not sure why you can't touch rain?
but it started raining as I opened this poem, now that's weird <grin>
The rainy day theme enhances this poem right out of the gate. The illustration is so fitting and just right for the words. I liked this quite a lot.
Saying so much with so few words, even the thousand or so evoked by the illustration.
Saying so much with so few words, even the thousand or so evoked by the illustration.
I like the way the picture fits this poem, doesn't hide the text although the text is over it.
This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 36,000 poems.
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