All Comments on 'Pay Up'

by wildsweetone

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Maria2394Maria2394almost 19 years ago
this is

obscenely graphic and sort of scary, but straightto the point, lol. I like it a lot, I think, but I have only read it about 5 times so far.

I think this has the wrong post date cause I only saw one E on yesterdays list and now there are 2 :)

keep up the good work!!

Bridget69Bridget69almost 19 years ago
Very gritty...

way of ending a transaction.

dcpoet44dcpoet44almost 19 years ago
splendid...

and definitely well done. nice visuals.......don

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 19 years ago
Straight talk

I haven't been around for awhile and I've just hit upon this. Wonderful straight talk WSO.

b'brig

Wanton VixxxenWanton Vixxxenalmost 19 years ago
I'm so glad your're a sweet one!!!

But I also realize the first part of your pen name is "wild". lol This is a VERY well deserved "E" basing it on the unusual topic and surprise twist {of the stiletto} at the end. Awww hell - the entire piece was dynamite! I haven't been here the last week and I'm now trying to play catch up with the votes at least, but I came across this poem and just had to leave a comment. Caught- Me- off- guard kind of poem that I'll be thinking about the rest of the day <shudder> lol

Shaking in Her style stilettos~

Vixxx

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
wow!

This one grabbed me allright! Good work, my buddy! I like it a lot!

Boo

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Tightly focused

This really has an impact. You have a way of showing the picture... in this case almost too well!

Great job, well deserving of the "E"

Bill DadaBill Dadaabout 18 years ago
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A powerful tale told with amazing econmy.

ty,bd

LeBrozLeBrozalmost 17 years ago
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This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 36,000 poems.

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lorencinolorencinoover 16 years ago
Anything I say

is not going to do justice to this gem.

KOLKOREKOLKOREover 16 years ago
A poem to remember

The imagery works to bring home the pov of the implied narrator with the heightened sensory alertness and irritability as explained at the end. A poem to remember.

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