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They're Everywhere: Politicians Ch. 02

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by LeBroz07/03/05

No Wimp Here

What a predatory whore she is!

And stupidly blind as well. She also shows how little she knows her husband. Just because he appears to back down to her, she assumes she can keep on whoring around with impunity.

His lawyer's going to have a field day with the documentation her husband compiled along with the illustrated version from her own digital camera!!

Only question - is there a final chapter detailing her final gangbang as well as the explosion of the divorce and all the political repercussions?

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by LeBroz07/03/05

whoops

There's a mysterious break in the text - proof of her ?????
I quote the relevant section below:

"damage regarding her management of the office and the errors in the Auditor's report. The gangbang would be proof of her

As Ann drove home she had extremely too much to drink and had taken too many drugs. She parked her car almost sideways "

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by Anonymous07/03/05

Lousy story--really piss-poor

This shitty story is so bad that even Papatoad could not salvage it. I doubt that I have ever read a worse composition. The Literotica head honchos should ban this author. His/her flimsy excuse for erotic literature is a sham and a shame. I'm sure that you sick motherfuckers will rave about this bullshit.

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by Nightowl2207/03/05

Definitely a whore!

It's hard to imagine someone fucking everyone available, as she is doing, with the idea of getting a promotion from it.
Apparently the marriage will be terminated but Jeff should get something from each of the five men. Something that hurts them. Maybe $500,000 from each? On the pay as you go plan if nothing else. Maybe exposure to the press? Something. Just fucking over a man's wife should be punished some way!!

Maybe a police raid at the house??

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by The Navigator07/03/05

So so....

At the beginning this story had some possibilities. Now, I'm not sure. Too many grammatical and spelling errors detract from whatever else is being said. With this episode, all believeability was lost. Even science fiction has to make sense. This doesn't.

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by fumunda cheeze07/03/05

Inconsistencies

Come on now Vastie, Don't insult the reader. "She woke up naked next to the fridge in the kitchen but her husband had taken their son out for breakfast." Bullshit lady. The first place a kid heads for when he gets up in the morning is to piss and then to the KITCHEN.

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by Anonymous07/03/05

PLEASE REGROUP

I can't believe this is the author of the excellent "Who the Hell is John?. This story is not in the least believable and the grammar and spelling errors are just awful. Go back to square one, vastie.

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by Anonymous07/03/05

The hole is getting deeper

I love the way you create situations of desperation and how you are able to make your characters seem so dispicable. The next segment will be a reach and I am looking forward to how you make it work.(you will won't you?)

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by Anonymous07/03/05

The Story Is Ok

It is different. Not the same old thing. Yeah, the character of Ann is a stretch but it is a story. Could it be more believable and better? Sure.
Erotic? No. More soap opera, but it is a story and not just a sex scene.
Let's see how it ends, though the outcome is predictable but what wrinkles will be employed?
Bullshit? That's what most of life is. There are some stories that are good, thought out well, written well. Others can be entertaining in their own way but we don't give them much credence.
This story is Ok, not great, but OK.

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by Anonymous07/03/05

If you like a CHEATING WIFE story than you'll

fucking love this one!!!! WHAT A BITCH!!!!!! This story is just what Lit needs to keep people yelling back and forth and discussing it. Some will love it some hate it but there will be a lot of chatter back and forth about it. Good story line and a very nice build up about a whore who doesn't care about her family at all. Jeff should destroy her if possibile. Can't wait until the ending to see how Vastie handles all of this. And I hope she tells us who wrote the notes to start Jeff off thinking about his cheatying wife. GREAT JOB!

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by Anonymous07/03/05

Another Wimp Husband Story

If she had married a man who took care of ALL her needs instead of a creap who lives for revenge she would have been much happier.

Another sick puppy story.

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by Anonymous07/03/05

If you want to write,

get some help!

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by Anonymous07/03/05

Interesting but. . .

I am finding your premise interesting. I have seen many people both male and female get so involved in some activity that they lost all perspective on the rest of their lives. Yes, it is somewhat of a stretch in this case, but still worth watching the developments as they unfold. I disagree with the wimp comment, which has yet to prove itself out.

But you do need to do a little more editing on your stories. There are several typo's and spelling errors that would be easily caught if you read it though before submitting. You also would have caught sections like the refrigerator section that did not make a whole lot of sense or were hard to follow.

Keep working at it and you will improve. JimDinMN

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by Anonymous07/03/05

ENJOY YOUR STORIES

I really like your stories. The best one is who the hell is john. It's great to read a story where there are consequences for a whore wife. Getting little tired of reading stories where the husband just puts up with his cheating wife, or gets so turned on and horny watching his wife fucked that he enjoys being a cuckold. Would be nice if stories were more realistic. Anyways this story is great so far and i hope that jeff destroy's both his wife and the men that she is screwing. I know i would. Keep up the good work. Looking forward to the next chapter.

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by Anonymous07/03/05

great

fuck them all ..money honey ...makes the world go round ... those politicians will pay very good not to have this come out dont you think

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by Chagrined07/04/05

Vastie, what happened?

Your john story was great but are just paddling around here! This is not you best effort. But hey, no one is perfect every time. Basically I like your stuff. So keep pit up. However, that said I had to agree with a few things here. First, would a father really leave his wife, mother of his child sitting against the fridge in such a condition? I don't think so. He may want to, but if he loves the child, he would never do. Cheese is right, the kid would have seen her for sure!

Also, really understand why some of the readers think that her actions are ok, or want to excuse her behavour. Unfortunately, I suspect that these same readers are the first ones to bitch when their taxes go up to provide service for disfunctional families because the parents are too busy to parent! LOL!

Keep up the good work but tighten the plot a bit.and give the husband a pair of balls for crying out loud!

PS. I will almost bet that The wife herself is the one writing the warning to Jeff her husband. It would be a great psychological study if he was. "Unable to help or stop herself, Anne wrote to her husband and warned him, hoping his strong manly presence woudl put a stop to her madness?"

Nice twist? :-)

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by msboy807/04/05

Good Job

She and all her lovers are going to get what they have comming to them. I especially liked the cucumber bit.

Do the editor thingy, soonest!

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by gatorhermit07/06/05

Sequel coming?

Hope you continue with the 'rest of the story...' or is the divorce the end?

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by vastiesmith07/06/05

No!!! The third and final chapter is pending now

Chapter 3 has been with Lit for 4 or 5 days. Was hopig it would be published yesterday. Thanks so much for everyone who left their names and comments good and bad. Again no wimpy men in my stories.

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by SKHP09/18/11

Not really a story

It is more an outline than a real story. Each sentence brings a new step. There is not a bit of tension, just a row of accidents.
This is no fun to read. Some commenters pointed out the inconsistencies - there are even more. And please, will somebody explain to me why it took so long for the husband to take action? Not worth more than 3*

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by tazz31712/23/11

PATIENCE BEING A VIRTUE

to allow table turning. TK U MLJ LV NV

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