by DoctorWyldcard
I must say that I actually teared up reading this this. Great ending. It's been a while since a story has touched me the way this one has. One of the best and one of my favorites.
What a great story from beginning to end. But I've got to tell you, you rang my chimes with the ending. My wife died of Ovarian cancer almost 10 years ago and I can feel his pain. Anyway Thank You! Ronnie W.
A brilliant ending to a great story. Looking forward to the next series!
A very heartfelt, touching ending. It caused tears to fall. I must be old to become so maudlin. Loved this ending. This could be a story unto itself, really.
Thanks for writing this.
Great Story from beginning to end. The love that the whole family felt for each other was very evident. The pain and sorrow felt by each of the wive's death was also well written. A most unusual love story. Thanks for a good read.
Beautiful, heart warming story. Some things do transcend time and death and it's nice to be reminded of them from time to time. Kudos Doc!
I can't think of a thing to say that would better this story. It's original, brings out the emotions all the way along. It is unblushingly romantic, which suits this old romantic completely.
Doug
I can't think of a thing to say that would better this story. It's original, brings out the emotions all the way along. It is unblushingly romantic, which suits this old romantic completely.
Doug
I can't think of a thing to say that would better this story. It's original, brings out the emotions all the way along. It is unblushingly romantic, which suits this old romantic completely.
Doug
You did a great job writing it and it was very original idea. I hope you continue writing stories like this for a very long time.
The story was great from start to finish. The writing was excellent and I look forward to more from you.
This is the epitome of a grandly executed idea. the characters are all believable and I loved the ending. The deserved rest and reward for the good life lived is a seldom told story on this site lately. Well done and perfectly executed. my thanks for your effort.
i thought ath this was amazing, i was thinking that after the second part that things wold fall apart, but if dnt right as you have it, it works in the end. lovely story.
i wish that you would go through and do other stories with these characters.. and bring up the orginal 3 from time to time. keep writing these, please.
--a. lynne
A very touching and loving story. It brought tears to my eyes. Very well done.
That was one of the best stories I have read. Even though I am a guy and I hardly ever cry unless I am in alot of pain, I cried like a baby...lol Really great story. Keep up the good work and maybe you could write an alternate ending to this story. One with a happy ending that doesn't make you cry...lol
I'm a 55 yr. old factory worker. I'm not supposed to be boo-hooing over some story on the internet. I really enjoyed that it was truly a 'Loving Wives' story. It wasn't built on deceit and betrayal, although those elements were initially present, and it wasn't driven by pain or revenge. Yet, even without these emotional triggers so common to this genre, I unexpectedly find myself deeply moved by your story. Reading your works chronologically, it seems to me that you are getting better each time out. PLEASE continue to share your talent here. I'll just have to go buy myself a hankie.
I truly almost missed this story, read your most recent submission, really liked it, so I went to your other stories, saved this series for last; and you BLEW ME AWAY! Without a doubt, one of the best stories on this or any other site, that I believe I've ever read, especially from an "amateur" author {which, BTW, you definitely are not). The story line was very well done, believable characters, very nice plot development; and the ending was all and more than I could have wished for. The ending expresses my belief in the afterlike to a "T", and like others who have commented, it moved me to tears. I really want you to write more, your work is outstanding, you should consider "romance" writing for publicatoin in mainline publishers. Great, great work, & I truly hope you are motivated to write again. BTW, your most recent, Beyond Repair, is also very good, although a bit truncated. I'd like to see a sequel, where maybe the wife realizes, but too late, just what she gave up.
All I can say is unbelievable. That might be the most amazing story I've ever read.
Sitting here with tears rolling down my cheeks. How have I not read this before. FANTASTIC story.
The best story I have ever read on this site AND the first time I submitted a comment. I am a male who does not cry too often but I really teared up for this story. PLEASE, PLEASE keep writing. It would truly be a great loss if you don't continue.
for a very fine read. Now let me dry my
eyes... You know I felt sorry for
Tom! He really screwed up because of his insecurity.
I had read this series when it was posted and stumbled upon it again. Wow. Good work, DWC.
Why the hell dont you write more? Looking forward to anything new from you.
Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop. It was a great story and I wish you would write more. It made me sad and happy. I love everything about the story, esp. the ending. Waiting for your future works of art! Keep writing.
now that is one outstanding last chapter. the best. you got me crying, dang it!
reading this story and it still makes tear up. best last chapter i've ever read.
...see the comments for the tears rolling down my cheeks. That last scene was BEAUTIFUL...
I am a grizzly old codger. Your story made ME cry. I don't mist up over a story, what just happened to me. You have talent and you have such potential, and if you bio is accurate you are still so young. Thank you very much for the story. anon jerry
that you need to check yourself into a mental asylum. You seiouly need help. This is what you call a story?
No Words to express the emotions i felt while reading your work. It is a wonderful story with wonderful beginning in the end, hope could find such relationships in real world(not refering to polygamy but the feelings of love, trust, and companionship). Expecting more of this kind of masterpiece from you ...............Thax for your contribution.
THIS STORY WAS.. INCREDIBLE!!! I MEAN I FELT EVERY EMOTION IN THE BOOK.. HAPPY SAD MAD GUILTY... I MEAN THIS STORY IS LIKE ARTWORK!!! AND YOU FIT IT ALL IN 3 CHAPTERS!!!!! I THINK I OFFICIALLY LOVE YOU!! LOL! THIS PEICE WAS AMAZING!!! A TRUE 5/5!! YOU SHOULD WRITE MORE!!! THANKZ FOR AN AWESOME READ!
And I'm a guy that never cries. That should tell you how moved I was.
A timeless storyline with balanced emotions and feelings......the best ending with a wonderful beginning. Even after all these years the story still touches emotional side............!
Really enjoyed your story and hope there will be more in the future.
WOW! what can I say.Even at my age (Not young) tears can still come to the eyes.It had everything a story can have.Sex Romance.A little violence...... Once again...WOW!
brought some tear to my eyes. didnt know i was allergic. lol. Awesome story. Thanks!
I'm male, 65, and hetro. This yarn gave me wet eyes more than once. Good stuff and many thanks.
It would be nice to think that the spirit lives on, one never knows.
A 53 year-old, Retired Chief-of-Firing Battery has no reason to cry over an Internet short story. May the fleas of a 100 ferrets infest your scalp! :)
Damn good read.
I agree with those before me. Very touching story and well written. Thanks
I have read this darn thing a dozen times or more, I suppose, and every time - every single, blasted time - I finish it with tears in my eyes. Me, a grown man, woosing out like that.
Beyond all that... Thanks. I don't know what else to say. Just thank you.
when its our time, lets hope and pray we have someplace to go and someone to see and is waiting for us. TK U MLJ LV NV
I read your blog about lack of time to write, I hope you are ok and thinking about more submissions. Respectfully TK U MLJ LV NV
Making adult - strong - men weep - shit -
The whole story is good - some ups and downs and some editing would help BUT what a roller coaster -
The ending is just so visual, so penetrating, so affecting - I am worn out
If only any of that ending is possible it might make all of the rest of the universe worth dealing with - most of us will not have an Andy or Amanda waiting but maybe we will have someone to care about us or for us to care about if we are lucky -
Thanks - come back write more -
You like making grown men cry? I really liked Alex and the sisters. Just wish you'd rewrite the end, make it a lot longer. The sisters died too quickly. I would have liked more meat there, and the deathbed scene should be lengthened and reworked. I would have liked a little hugging, kissing, and welcoming there at the end. Of course this was a five; that's the most the web site allows.
I'm sitting here, tears streaming down my face, not just because it's gloriously happy, but it's about the kind of father I wanted to be but never was.
Hell of a thing to be so trapped by the ugly side of our culture and his own cowardice and insecurity. Literally, a loser.
Positively, absolutely beautiful series... I'm crying-wishing I could fing even half a love like that.
I have not written many comments to many stories BUT after reading this story, I have to say it is one of the most beautiful stories that I have ever read (in all of literature). I wanted the story to keep going on and on. You should be very proud of what you accomplished with this story. Thank You for your writing!
This may be the best story that I've read on this site. You had me crying like a little girl.
A wonderful story, full of feeling and a real tear jerker. Keep up the good work, thankyou
Just read all 3 chapters, and when I got to the end I cried like a child. Very well written.
writing a Love story this transcendent should be illegal , i voted this series 5 stars , but that just does not do it justice ,
with a story like this there is no base line ,
nowhere you can go for comparrison,
No , thats not true , there is Literature that this in my opinion fits comfortably on the same shelf as , We call them Classics , you will find them in bookshops & you will find them in Librarys . i know this is only a very short story , but one can tell from all the praise expressed in the comments , that its so very easy to fill in the Beauty & Love & the joy experienced by this very unique & very special family during the years not covered by the Author .
i read this for the 1st time on my tablet/palm during lunch.
my colleagues thought i had received some tragic news.
i guess that will happen when someone starts whispering, ogod ogod ogod, is clearly in distress & has streams of tears rolling down thier face.
you Bastard , you utter Bastard ,
why did she have to die so soon ? . only 41 you fcker ,
the youngest children are just babes, not even in high school.
could you have not let Andy reach 50 ?
have let them enjoy another decade ?
would that have ruined the story ?
would letting the family grow up in bliss together
for just a few more years have buggered the plot ?
Andy die @ 50 , Amanda @ 75 , Alex @ 96 ish ,
would that really have been so bad ?.
would it have detracted in anyway from what you wanted to achieve ?
omg ,
How do i love thee? Let me count the ways ...............
You have done what only three other stories have done while reading them. 1-OLD YELLER, 2- WHERE THE RED FERN GROWS, and TO THE FAR BLUE MOUNTIANS made tears run before I finished. VERY WELL DONE to put an ending on a good story..
Thank You.
I know that this is only a work of fiction, but your presentation almost makes it read like fact. So much so that this 'oldun was brought to tears. Thankyou.
Maybe when in a more appropriate place I'll re-read this...
Kind of reminds me of the TV show "The Medium"... not in the show itself but rather in that in the ending of the show, after all its seasons, the last episode basically went through the whole life she'd have had AFTER the show ended.
Snapshot answers to the big questions of "What next?"
I enjoyed these stories - just sorry to see them end.
Of all the stories I have read and re-read on literotica this is one of only 2 or3 that brought me to tears. Bravo! Keep writing.
Of the stories this author has posted on this site, this one is the best and most entertaining. It has bee nine years since this author posted a story on Lit. Like many good and excellent authors who just disappear without a trace so has this one.
you made an old guy cry, with happiness and love ... just thank you
Just like gremlin, you made an old guy get emotional. Brilliant story. Thank you.
Beautiful series. I swear someone must have been chopping onions near by cause my eyes were watering
I'd of left my wife at the first mention of what she and her sister wanted me to do. It's cheating no matter how you try to disguise it.
A beautiful trilogy that had me in tears at the end beautiful example of polyamory relationships
Very good story. It works as a short story and I only hope that you will write similar stories in the future. Those onions must be permeating the story as I was hardly able to read the end through the tears. Good work please keep it up and keep to the same quality. Well done you did good.
And this is my favorite. Please continue writing. It has been a breath of fresh air reading your stories
Enjoyed it, good thing the security lock in my server room is on, going to a while before I want to see anyone.
Well, good thing this wasn't on paper, or else it'd be too wet to read. Heart-wrenching and wonderfully written.
I'm a 55 year old ex army,semi-macho SOB, and you made me tear up. 5 stars aren't enough. Thank you.
Well, I hope you are proud of yourself! You brought me to tears.
Great writing.
Frank
Ten out of five, I wish everyone on here could write half as well as you do, I’m 68 and you reduced me to tears.
I lost my wife three months ago, after 51 years of love, and this story has impacted me like no other. I cried, I sobbed, I longed for what was lost, but I know that we will be together again--we MUST! Wonderful story, which keeps on inspiring! Bravo!!!
Great ending to a disfunctional middle. Enjoyed this one immensely though it is tainted by the middle and end of the first chapter.
Just a great 3 part story, great characters, even Thomas. Sort of wished you could have avoided the gay kids, just leave that "stuff" out. Someone is always "pushing" the lbgt stuff on our society. I have nothing against L,G or in betweens. I just don't need to see and hear it every day.
Its a shame that the time periods jump so much. it would have been nice to have filled them out better. Nice ending though.
I agree. I would like to know more of the deaths, the first one being an after thought and as said by many, sections that could have been bulked out. Very good ending.