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Karen's Pool Party

bySean Renaud©
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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous08/11/05

Get an editor

Any heat this story was generating was doused by the errors.

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by don8765408/11/05

Very, Very Wonderful!

Story content more than made up for any errors in writing this story.

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by Azuldrgon08/12/05

It's perfect!!

I thought it was well written. The best part was karen taking charge and taking control from the perfect girl!!

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by Anonymous07/18/07

Very good!

This was an excellent story, yes there were a few minor grammatical errors, but it didn't bother me any. great story!

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by Anonymous11/11/07

Awzome Written i did see some grammatical problems but its worth 5/5 *Ras*

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by Anonymous06/02/09

David?

Not sure who David was, but it ruined the moment trying to figure it out.

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by Gageless08/11/13

David?

"Anything special you'd like to see baby?" Karen asked smiling as she stared at David's cock tenting his boxers toward the night sky.

- who the hell is David? Best not to change character names midway. Just a tip ;)

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