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Wasted Dreams

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by Anonymous

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by sweet GA peaches09/01/05

there is NO

way that anything about your words were ever wasted,
as i can read clearly, and you hold the astonishing ability to create what mouths cannot say, and most cannot think... you take your reader beyond a point of knowing, into a thought that leaves behind an aspiration of visions with a grasp to get there... luv2theblue.......-sgp-

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by RhymeFairy09/01/05

Dreams Do Inspire ~

Inspiring dreams, of heartstrings joy
... feeding through. Wanting to be
released from prisons ... imprisonment.
Joy to you my Friend. Love this
sad look at wasted Dreams on realities heart ...

I also have to say this. You have just painted,
one of the most sad/beautiful pictures
I have seen in a while. Just loved it.
~ Just Me ~

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by Anonymous09/01/05

hazy

"Soft sighs and baby blues
watch crude castles crumble
in current’s blind eye."
This poem said so much more, but this is my kind poetry.
sand

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by My Erotic Tale09/02/05

blue

I enjoyed your poem

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by Anonymous09/04/05

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Lulling...rhythmic..The last verse, by far the best-- with a nice wrap up. A nit: period at the end of the first verse... the alliteration in the middle verses is good, but maybe too much of a good thing? I always feel with alliteration and rhyme (internal or end) puts a light song like feel to the poem, which can distract the reader from the deeper layers.

Very well done, Blue! Keep writing, the steps you are making are noticable and forward progressing. Thanks-
as

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by Bill Dada09/04/05

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A very powerful poem.

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