All Comments on 'Just a Plain Everyday Girl'

by Softly

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BadBoyABadBoyAover 18 years ago
A Lovely Fairy Tale

A good read if you enjoy 'knight in shining armour' stories.

EffectEffectover 18 years ago
Very nice

Great story, very enjoyable.

PAPATOADPAPATOADover 18 years ago
Good Read

I liked it and will look for more of your stories. Thanks

saw_man1saw_man1over 18 years ago
Like most of us

On the outside, aren't most of us ordinary? Thank you for a wonderful, heartwarming story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
good flow

very well written as well as entertaing to read.

kydreamrkydreamrover 18 years ago
Well written and very intense

Softly, your stories keep getting better and better. I really appreciate the way you can pack so much meaning into so few words while creating a scenario that pulls your readers into the story, letting them join in the scenes in their minds.

Thanks!

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
A good story -

- well told. Could have been a bit more erotic.....?

Lukas

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Coulda been better

I really liked the lead characters but GEEZ, give them some time to fall in love. Love at first sight is one thing, but this was too fast. You could have really had a great story worthy of several chapters.

Reiner43Reiner43over 10 years ago
Sweet story!

A different and enjoyable mental trip. Good stuff!

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
good story

his father saw something in Ellen and just went with it. 5 stars kind of short and to the point

Ron

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Too fast, too dumb

The "average" girl is going to take a stranger's dick and gift wrap it on the first night she meets him? And he's the bosses son? That's too far fetched even for fiction. Pretty silly.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
What a great story....

Thanks for sharing it.

nighthawk22204nighthawk22204about 4 years ago
Great story

Great scenario, great plot, great story line, great language, great characters. Really lacking in character development of half of the characters, like the twins, but does a great job with the others. For a one pager, both very exciting, erotic and complete.

Rancher46Rancher46about 2 years ago

hanging start to a love story but missed the mark when the end of the story left me hanging as a reader. 4 stars

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Suddenly the young rich boy totally falls in love with the girl because she tied a ribbon around his penis while he was passed out drunk? They didn't even know each other, and they were both instantly ready to conceive a child to make the relationship permanent. I know this is a sex fantasy site, but come on! This is beyond ridiculous.

Anonymous
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