All Comments on 'Hold on to this Moment'

by RedHairedandFriendly

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LeBrozLeBrozover 18 years ago
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Very nice, I like it, especially in the imagery. A problem I sense here is a rhythm that seems to falter in spots. But don't get discouraged - you've just started out here. Let your creative juices keep flowing - overall, you're off to a great start with your verse.

My Erotic TaleMy Erotic Taleover 18 years ago
very nice~

thanks again for the read <grin> (~_*) holding on to this moment

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