All Comments on 'The Sorceress'

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cookiejarcookiejarover 18 years ago
The moral of the story?

Be careful what you wish for; you just might get it ... in spades. Very nice work. Good luck!

Cookie :)

fairysongfairysongover 18 years ago
I'll be careful when casting spells....

....esp. on Samhain. Loved the story. You should write more often Moonie. Luck.~Tinkerbell.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
True love

does not always win, huh? A good story, but I would have liked a bit more fight from a sorceress. But who am I? LOL

Good luck.

Black Tulip

Rumple ForeskinRumple Foreskinover 18 years ago
That was a fun read

A nice, spooky read, elf. You did an especially good job of quickly setting the mood and place.

Rumple

sacksackover 18 years ago
a pleasure to read...

it's hard to write about fictional characters like this, but you succeeded. Good luck in the contest!

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Interesting

I loved the story just wish it were a little longer.

Boxlicker101Boxlicker101over 18 years ago
Spooky and Creepy

But needs some editing. I enjoyed the story but it would read better with different structuring of your sentences.

hugo_samhugo_samover 18 years ago
Warning

A spledid cautionary tale of lost love in the hands of someone with the power to erase the loss. Strong feelings in a very short period of time, enjoyable.

cloudycloudyover 18 years ago
Very nice!

Good story, elfie....I enjoyed it immensely....please do write more.

Honey123Honey123over 18 years ago
Magical

I enjoyed the tale you spun in your story! More...more!!

~Honey

rgraham666rgraham666over 18 years ago
Creepy piece of work

Well written and quite disturbing.

And letting out an evil little laugh about the climax. The universe is ordered a particular way, and trying to break the rules has unpleasant consequences.

Well done.

neonlyteneonlyteover 18 years ago
Enchanting

Nice tale, imaginative.

AliyahlovinsexAliyahlovinsexover 18 years ago
loved it

Love has a strange way of clouding reason and making people forget everything else. That definitely came out in your story, and even though her task was nearly impossible and risky, she attempted it in the name of love. Chilling, but I agree with Black Tulip (I think) I would have enjoyed a longer story with a bit of fight from Ceara. But for what it was, it was great :D

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