very nicely done, ending where it should.
this line is a little shopworn, even considering the context.
"with slow languorous caresses."
"Now in a dress more exotic,
shimmering hues ~ yellow, red, orange, and gold;
her dance, choreographed by outside forces,
speaks anxiously of erotic surrender."
LeBroz these lines run through my head like a river of quicksilver. If there is a more sensual way to describe a season I've never seen it. This poem is going in my favorites.
brilliant as my british buddy...would say..
Lover of nature poems that I am... this poem soars in my book excellent poetry!
grand tribute my friend to your
added collection *smiles* ,
(love seeing titles under your name)
I loved your use of sensual metaphor,
and the season's dance,
It reminded me of 'the mummers dance'
very sexy this was and blossoming
well...into a sweeeet exotic arrangement.
A song of nature one can dance to, great job.
This made me think of how quickly summer has come and gone. Excellent writing! You one of the best one here.
This made me think of how quickly summer has come and gone. Excellent writing! You one of the best ones here.
Love it LeBroz !!!
Very slow read, with a sizzling lil sensual punch.
I love the feel of this light and soft dance
through your heart ...
... really inspiring ~!!
Wow! Leon, I really love this one! Spectacular imagery throughout. Love the blend of nature with sensuality...well done!
And what of the nakedness of winter? I suppose that makes Spring modest - which I'd never thought of before!
A lovely poem.
The perfect read for this first day of spring, especially down here in the Deep South. Soon her spring flowers will be replaced by shades of vibrant green and the pines will lose their dull green.
So I decided to check out LeBroz to see what you have to offer. Your word usage is clean and concise; I so enjoyed this little poem, but I wonder, why don't you do one for each season? I like this almost-erotic feel you have here; listing this as one I especially like. I'll have to go down the list of your other offerings over time.
Leon, Love this one (but of course)and you should follow that suggestion about doing three more for the other seasons. This one has such an active vibrant feeling; I can't wait to see how you do the other seasons! CP
And I finally had to sign up and leave this comment. I really love this piece and agree with these other recent comments about doing the other seasons. My only request is that you not make it a Part 1, 2, 3, & 4 or something as lame; try something different.
I'll never look at a tree in quite the same way. Who ever knew they could be having so much fun!!!
for all four seasons will make a Norman Rockwell style painting that I'm very eager to visualize within your verses! This premiere all- season poem has Me salivating for the others as individual pens, Leon. And if that's not enough of a nudge, please look outside your Buffalo, NY windows and see Mother Nature has FINALLY given the northeast the season of spring. This poem, of course, is in My faves as you have given Me both an exotic and erotic glimpse of a tree's quad seasons dance. However you intend to title the subsequent pieces, I am looking forward as so many others here are, to the LeBroz Ballroom Dances of Nature.
Spending so much time on the roads and trails of the South, I'll never take those trees for granted anymore. Now I don't know what you'll do about the other seasons, but Spring has to be dressed in lingerie!!! Billie
In praise of what nature has to offer, strip again and delight me when I see your clothing this time, it would not be the same.
The colors play so well together, don't they? But autumn certainly is an exhibitionist, to say the least. I love your promise of spring and I do hope she buys a new green dress for that dance! Wonderfully appealing, like the seasons themselves. ~JaneAusten
I am so glad the poem popped up!(the joys of the new technical wizardry available now!). I think the poem should have been classified under erotic. First: just because it describes nature it does not mean it can't be erotic -as it is! (I hate to quote myself, but if I must..."sex is everywhere"). Second, you fooled me for a good portion of the poem, sex was on MY mind. Best season's poem I have seen in quite sometime.
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