All Comments on 'Sunday'

Just as sexy as your other story, and more accessable (to me, anyway.) I like this one a lot. I noticed 2 grmmatical errors - a sentence fragment and the word "shutter" when you mean "shudder," but aside from that it's all great.

Good work!

Would have liked a bit of dialogue to set up the characters a bit, but a pretty good effort.

Very atmospheric, though very different from your other story. I really hope you keep writing for Lit. I would just hate it if you only wrote two stories.

and whoever has you as part of their lives, even in the smallest capacity, is VERY lucky!

Wow! I need a cigarette now. ;)

H.P.L.

It may be a backhanded complement, but you know just how good you are when the hacks saboutage your vote totals from sheer jealousy. Don't let the bastards get you down.

That was a spot on description of those moments in time when nothing else matters. Your description of the breaking of this spell was actually my favorite part of the story.

You're a master story-teller. I love the slow seduction that your words manage to bring about.

This is brilliant.

A stunning bit of prose. I am in love with what you have done here.

Amazing

I hate first person narratives.

shr