I really enjoyed it...
just one way i would have loved it done to me at that age. unfortunately, i was too scared at the time. very hot, took your time getting there, but not too much excess. a nice slow build, got my attention, if ya know what i mean............... :-)
you're amazing. not many people can combine romantic and HOT, but you do it. lovely.
What an incredible story. I love the way you start off slow seeting up the characters so I felt like I knew them, and felt like I was right there in the story. What a hot and surprisingly romantic story, very well done.
Another great story.
I always look to see if you have another posting.
Good story. Nice to see an author exploit the dramatic potentials of dom-sub partnerships while keeping the inherent risk of excess in check.
that was so cute and a realli hot story...keep on writing cuz ur obviously good at it
I'm a married woman who must have been a gay man in a previous life. I LOVE man on man and you're stories capture my fantasies perfectly! Never stop writing...
I am a woman, and I found this story as one of the greatest and hottest ones I've ever read. You should definately keep writing more, you are extremely talented at this. I found the characters to be very well-defined, and the story was strangely romantic as well as SOOOOO hot. Great story indeed, congratulations.
really, really beautifull - your writing and imagination - honestly WOW! Keep on giving this quality of writing to us, we love it.
wonderful story, I loved how he may have been 20 but was really only a boy. The innocence mixed with the raw sexuality of him.....a lamb in wolfs clothing ;) excellent work. I hope you consider writing another chapter.....more please :D
I just love this one, too bad there isn't a second part. It's fine by itself, but it would be better with a second part *wink* :)
There needs to be more for these two. I need a lot more of them.
hot and sweet! i love your stories!
and sexy! A superb combination of innocence and lust...
I wish you had developed the older man's character a bit and to be honest I had hoped there would be a second chapter.
I am a woman and find man on man sex very arousing.
There were so many possibilities, the story could have gone down may paths,however the story was about taking a young man's virginity and this you did extremely well.
It was simply beautiful. I found myself falling in love with both of them. I was immediately intrigued as St. Sebastian is my favorite. Bravo.
The purity and scandal mixed with sheer sex is simply intoxicating. Nara, you've a gift here, and I hope you use it. Definitely my favorite single story yet.
it's smoking hot........ perfect erotica.......... do u try writing stories for publication? U will succeed.....
I really enjoyed reading your story! I love the way you mix the physical with the emotional, and how the resulting combination is so raw, sensual, sweet and heartbreaking! :)
i am in love with you and your stories, naradragonfly. also, am i correct in thinking you have background as a fanfic writer? i'm a fangirl of various fandoms, and there's something about your writing that trips my fellow-fangirl radar.
on this story, loved it, as per usual with you. one thing, though: "Basti" makes me cringe as a] i know someone named Basti (and therefore no fault of yours) and b] it's such a...crude? variation of such a beautiful name as sebastian. sebastian has such a ring to it, don't you think, as opposed to basti? (*cringes*)
This story is so sweet and very well described and written. I think the emotional attachment the two seemed to have made the sex all that much better.
it`s one of the best i read...just hope you contuinuo this story it´s to good to just lived like that....
Great story, so sweet and romantic. Thanks
I cannot say enought about this story.My heart is so full of peace and joy.Sill i wish to know more.
I think this is my favorite story by you! So good! Thank you for sharing!
I love Tj, he's so sweet and innocent yet sexy at the same time
This is so sweet. Do you think that this could maybe be a series?
I'd love to read more about these two
This was exquisite. But please continue it. Pretty please :)
Please... PLease... PLEase... PLEAse... PLEASe... PLEASE!!! Can there be a sequel?!?
I just /LOVE/ this!!!
T.j is the cutest little thing. I'd love to read more of how he relates to the world. I'd love to know how he turns Sebastion's world upside down as well!
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