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Two Stiff Ones for Julie

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by Jerry Walfell12/12/05

Don't be afraid . . .

It's OK--you can put more than one sentence in a paragraph, and if you do, the story will even start to flow, rather than just jerk . . . ing . . .a . . . long. Try it.

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by Anonymous07/27/08

Good but...

This would be a lot better if you didn't keep switching the tenses on us.

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