by barrysmith
Having worked for Playboy for two years I think I enjoyed it more. You took it at the right pace up till the end when he said " masturbate " and then it seemed to fly the wrong way . Had she just done it on her own and then asked him for help it would have gone better .
This is part 1, so I didn't expect things to culminate right away. I thought you created wonderful tension between the characters, provided enough detail but didn't get bogged down with it, and moved the story along nicely. Plus, I love the theme of a daughter posing for her father...
I can't wait for part 2!
I can just about buy this girl posing for her dad, but offering to masturbate for him (the kind of photos likely to cause Playboy to bounce her application) and then asking him to reciprocate? Unlikely, I'd have thought, unless they had a previous history of sexual abouse.
Well written but Right from the start this was wrong. Step daughter would be better. Neighbours daughter would be perfect.